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[Fic] Moonlight on Masks - Making the Cut

Mar 27, 2007 01:07

Title: Making the Cut
Authors: kilerkki and nezumiko
Genre: Drama, Romance
Rating: T
Characters: Hayate, Ibiki, Tenzou, Other ANBU, Yuugao (in absentia)
Status: Second chapter, Worksafe

Summary: Hayate and the other ANBU captains cull through the candidates from the recent trials, including one Uzuki Yuugao.

collaboration, hayate, writing, ki, fanfic

Comments 3

beachlass March 27 2007, 14:04:23 UTC

You... *sputters*... called Ibiki a drama queen!

I liked Hayate's focus throughout... Hungry/prettygirl/hungry/mocking/pizza!/meeting, and the meeting clicked along and stayed interesting throughout. It also stayed really present, if that makes sense. You built the conflict about a woman in the hunters deftly.

Would you prefer comments on moonlit_anbu?

kilerkki March 27 2007, 15:02:43 UTC

*grins* Isn't her Ibiki awesome? (Alternatively--aren't the other ANBU captains awesome? Genta makes me so happy. XDD)

Glad the meeting worked for you. I was a little nervous about having so many OCs that a reader would have to keep track of, but I flattered myself into thinking we did a pretty good job--and apparently we did!

I don't know what Nene'll say, but I say "Oh yes, please, comment on moonlit_anbu. And pimp it out to all your friends! Reviews make us happy and prolific~"

We're trying to figure out places to pimp and if we can put it up on ff.net--we're just that much of review whores. XD

kilerkki March 27 2007, 15:00:12 UTC

I think you were right after all. I read through this morning, and aside from a couple awkward spots (mentioning Satoru by his full name the second time he's introduced, instead of the first) it went pretty well. Probably my obstinacy last night was all due to being deadly tired. XD

The ony real problem is that people won't know who to credit for all the brilliant lines! *laughs and loves*

On another note (sort of)--I didn't dream about Yuugao and Hayate last night. Instead, you came to visit! I was all excited about taking you to my favorite deli, though my roommates were being jerks... And for some reason there was massive construction in my apartment complex so we couldn't move around. Bizarre.