Chapter Ten. (More tying of loose ends.)

[chaosperfected]

Chapter: Eleven.
Rating: PG/PG-13
Pairings: Squall and Rinoa Selphie and Irvine.
Summary: Ellone in the company of Fujin and Raijin arrives at the brig. Already guessing what Squall has planned. She's not to thrilled.
Things go wrong.
Xu takes over.
Authors Notes: italics indicate a past event, while words surrounded in the square brackets [like

Comments

[beniboo]

o exsiting, cant wait to hear whats gunna happen....lol yay!!

[neo_rufus]

I must commend you for pulling the Ellone scene off, it was really funny, yet awesome. I once tried to do the same thing, but it didn't work out to well. In fact, this is the first story that I have ever seen that describes Ellone's powers like how you did, and I love how you done it.

Was it hard at first? Like planning what to say and what not?

Job well done, I look forward to the next chapter. ;)

[chaosperfected]

See the thing is, what I HAD trouble with was writing dialouge between the characters when Ellone is trying to disconnect.

See since it's all in her head, you can't.. have descriptive actions..
Just dialouge so I had to write lines and indicated who was who.

Seifer was hard, because while yes he's a jerk, he's trying to lighten up.

[neo_rufus]

Yes, I see what you mean.

No dialoge does makes thing allot harder. I did notice that you used keywords that deciphered who was who, and that was a huge help.

That's good to know he is starting to lighten up. I even read this chapter again, I think it's one of your best thus far. :D