Comments | new_shinra87: fic idea in the works for FF8.

chaosperfected in new_shinra87

fic idea in the works for FF8.

May 17, 2006 06:19

( Babysittining Duties: Prolouge )

final fantasy 8, squall, fan fiction, ff8, balamb, ideas

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ff7aeris May 17 2006, 13:47:44 UTC

Amusing, somewhat out of character, but rather amusing.

chaosperfected May 17 2006, 20:23:45 UTC

Heh. I'm someone who takes her writing seriously. If somethings out of character could you point it out to me and explain why you think that?

That way I can look it over and try to write it better. ^^;

ff7aeris May 17 2006, 20:42:52 UTC

Maybe of the extreme awkward situation.... that caught me off guard. It's kinda hard to compute in my head how a character like that would react. Brain go to goo

neo_rufus May 17 2006, 23:24:08 UTC

It's a pretty cool start. Nice idea and I am very curious of where the story is going. But if you would like some advice, I would be happy to give you some. I would say to try and make Squall a little bit less tense. I only day this because towards the end, he opens up a bit, and he isn't as cold, well that's what I think...judging from that huge smile he gave in the end of the game. Still, it's a good start. If you would like me to be a bit more specific...then just let me know. ;)

neo_rufus May 17 2006, 23:26:09 UTC

Oh and I hope you continue, despite the constructive criticism. You would be surprised how far you will get it. I'm sure it will turn out just fine. ;)

chaosperfected May 18 2006, 09:12:12 UTC

The idea is that because Rinoa is back home with her father sorting out her own problems, he's slowly reverting back. Eda knows this, so she decides to apoint Squall as Hayner's guardian/Babysitter. ^^;

According to my Eda muse, (that sounds so silly I know.) Having two people a child and adult so simmilar to each other, would teach them something. Like To Squall, he realizes that Hayner was a lot like himself and it really doesn't look as good as he thought it did when he was Hayner's age.

Hayner, when he sees Squall sees a future self within Squall and makes a decision to NOT be like that.
So pretty much both learn from each other.
That's the gist of the story.

neo_rufus May 18 2006, 12:25:42 UTC

Oh, ok I see. That does make sense now. In that case, keep going with how you want the characters to act. I can't wait to read the rest of your story. :)

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