Ally tries to write fanfiction, part two

[neurotic]

Here we go with chapter 2!

Category: CSI: Miami
Title: The First Five
Chapter: 2
Chapter Title: Chapter 2
Genre: Romance/utter fluff
Rating: Fiction Rated: K+ (this chapter). Future chapters may be rated T
Summary: Based on LJ community hiphuggerfics prompt "Five Times...", this is the story of the first five most important occurrences of Eric and

Comments

[mhopeg]

Aww! Very sweet first date.

This is great. Very in-character for both of them, I think. And I love the fact that there's so much we don't really know about Calleigh's background so fans can play with it.

You should try to write fanfic more often...you might just turn into a writer ;)

[neurotic]

Aww, you're so sweet. Thank you! I agree about Calleigh's background being so open- it kind of makes her more fun to write. =)

[citymusings]

(Commenting as I'm reading...)

We're best friends. Best friends never run out of things to talk about. And so what if I say something stupid? Calleigh will just laugh as I turn beet red. God, I love her laugh. Her smile. Everything about her. Perfect!!! So perfect! 'specially the beet red comment.

Eric couldn't help but grin at her stubborn refusal to wear any shoe that did not give her less than a few inches of added height. *laughs* That's cute. I'm 5'10" and I still love heels. (Though shouldn't that be more than a few inches?)

Their at the door conversation is so cute.

Aww, her first love story is so sweet, and not just the story, but Eric wanting to know. I can imagine him with a twinge of jealousy and relief that she's glad to have met him instead of marrying Kevin.

Oh, that's so sweet. I like that he's not rushing her, though I don't think she would have minded.

Awesome, awesome job! I hope there will be parts 3, 4, and 5 VERY soon!

[neurotic]

Thank you so much for taking the time to comment about my story. I really appreciate all the thought you put into it.

I read it over and realized I messed up the wording for the part about the heels. Thanks for pointing it out. =)

Oh, she definitely wouldn't have minded, but Eric knows she's special and doesn't want to do anything wrong. =P

I'm working on part 3, I've already got the framework for the last three parts, I just need to think up some more detail. =)

[citymusings]

Oh, totally my pleasure!

lol. No problem.

Yes, she is THE ONE for him!

YAY! I hope you have much success in thinking up details!

[somewhereapart]

I love him worrying that they won't have anything to talk about, because I think that is so true to life in any situation where the status quo of a relationship has changed. No matter how well you know them, there's always that moment where you think "what are we going to talk about???" Well captured!

[neurotic]

That's what I thought too. Any date in real life can run into that problem, and I figured that in order for the story to have realistic elements, they needed to borrow some real-life issues. Thank you for your compliments =)

[kels327]