DOGS FIC: Photographic Evidence

[neko_kururu]

Title: Photographic Evidence
Author: neko_kururu
Series: DOGS: Bullets & Carnage
Rating: R (not safe for work)
Characters: Mimi, Haine, Badou
Warnings: strong coarse language, explicit sexual imagery
Notes: GAH! Finally done! Between life and work and writer's block, I am finally finished with this one and I can finally move on! There may be some

Comments

[fangirl_complex]

Have I ever told you how much I love the way you write this pairing? Because I do. A lot.

As for errors, I noticed a lot of dialogue like this, "Blah blah blah." Said Badou. If dialogue ends with a period, it's replaced with a comma, and I'm pretty sure the word after doesn't have to be capitalized. So instead it would be like this, "Blah blah blah," said Badou.

Other than that, though I didn't see many other errors. This is fabulous and hilarious and just totally awesome. Keep up the good work!

Edit: Oops, forgot to add, if your dialogue is like this,

"Blah blah blah."

"Blah blah blah?"

"Blah blah blah!"

then don't end it with a comma. The comma only applies when you're attaching something like said or yelled, etc.

[neko_kururu]

Haha, thank you so much!

You know, that's odd, because I've been writing like that for years and no one told me anything. Is it really serious? If so, I'll change it right away! Either way, thank you for telling me, I had no idea about that rule. *writer fail* >___>;

[fangirl_complex]

Well, it's not really serious, but I think it's something good to know orz

[neko_kururu]

Well, I thank you very much for telling me. *FAIL writer is FAIL* u__u;

[evilgeniuskoji]

I liked how you wrote them a lot. Leave it to Badou to spoil the moments. I laughed so hard at the thought of Haine trying to have a "moment". xD

[neko_kururu]

Thank you. :D
Moments aren't big or frequent between the two of them, so when one pops up, they usually don't know how to deal with it. xD

[neko_kururu]

Yes! Hahaha, finally! n__n;
Mimi discovered the biggest secret of all, but didn't take any pictures for the fangirls! xDDD

Thank you darling~! >///

[hoticered]

OH GOD YOU WIN SO HARD THAT I MIGHT EXPLODE!!!!!!!!!!!!
..I FUCKING WISH I WAS YOU MIMI! I WISH. I. WAS. YOU. that was just a lovely, yummy, nummy, cute, adorable piece. I LOVED your dialog for those two jerkfaces (wish mine could be that...HEINEBADOU-ESK!) this is seriously wonderful. *LOVES*

[neko_kururu]

I think we all wish we were Mimi... T___T

THANK YOU! You make me blushhhh! >///<
Your fic & short prompts are just as good (though the skull-fuck thing creeped me out... o__O)! AND AUUUGH! Badou going "cig.pants.cig.pants.cig.pants.didn’t fuck Heine. Cigs." is my favourite part of your fic. <3

Anyway, thanks! *runs off*

[hoticered]

haha, aw THANK YOU for complimenting my stupid shit!
you're awesome :D

[neko_kururu]

It's not stupid, it's fun!

But yes, I am indeed awesome. xDDD

[noodlesticks]

“You asshole!” Snapped the albino, “I was having a fucking moment with you!”

“Well, so sorry I missed it.” He replied without really being sorry.

I sincerely LOL'D. I love how you write these two. It was hot and funny at the same time (and made me envy Mimi just a little bit).

[neko_kururu]

Nyaah! Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! >w<

I think we all wish we were Mimi in the closet... with a camera... a video camera....... yes, that's right...

xD