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naiveprophet

Earth-Shattering [4/?]

Jan 01, 2008 20:45

Title: Earth-Shattering [part 4]
Fandom: X-Men
Disclaimer: The characters belong to Marvel.
Rating: none
Pairing: None yet, but the featured characters are Ric/’Star
Feedback: I need it to keep going!
Author’s Notes: I can't believe it, but I actually managed to write this in like, a day and a half, with only a few changes, thanks to guiltycross's betaing.

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character:x-men:shatterstar, rating: none, writing: fanfiction: x-men, 101 in 1001:update, pairing: rictor/shatterstar, writing: series, character:x-men:julio [rictor]

Comments 16

twbasketcase January 2 2008, 03:21:12 UTC

Awesome work! I'm happy to see you haven't forgotten about this :)

I liked all of the back story you had with Rictor's nightmares -- with his family, touching on the Right, and his fear of hurting people. It's such a big, important part of his character and you had the psychology down perfect.

I also liked Shatty's role too. He wasn't too nurturing, and in a lot of way his logic was like Cable's -- which is believable. Actually I also liked the way you wrote Cable too. A lot of people don't do him justice.

Awesome job! Hope to see more of this soon :)

naiveprophet January 2 2008, 03:27:26 UTC

I never forget! I just take forever to update.

Thank you so much for this feedback! It boosts my confidence.

betterthanlegos January 2 2008, 03:22:17 UTC

Hee! I'm glad you updated this. Gosh, poor Julio. I really loved his interactions with Star though. Aw. Star's jus trying to help him, and they need each other. *guh* Hm. I see that Nate took his memories. Dang.

Wonder who Nate was talking to near the end. Domino, perhaps? Keen. Update when you can :)

naiveprophet January 2 2008, 03:29:16 UTC

Nate's a bastard. But a big one, so I wouldn't say that to his face. But he's just trying to help, right? Err...

Anyway! Thank you for the feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it! I will try to update soon. I still have a few weeks before I have to go back to school so we'll see!

eliyes January 2 2008, 12:55:17 UTC

Okay, this one made me cry. And also? Totally not the way to go, Cable. B| Gonna bite you on the ass when it wears off and he freaks, not to mention that the others will lose trust.

naiveprophet January 2 2008, 18:32:29 UTC

Yeah, Cable didn't really think this one through. >.>

Thanks for the feedback!

eliyes January 3 2008, 03:17:38 UTC

Means he's in character! I frequently bitch at the character when I read him. X3

naiveprophet January 5 2008, 00:45:18 UTC

hahaha, me too.

sarkka January 4 2008, 23:04:59 UTC

Hmm. what's going on ???

Very nice to see new chapters =)

naiveprophet January 5 2008, 00:43:54 UTC

Thank you for all of your comments! As for what's going on... that is the question, isn't it?

skysong6161 March 11 2008, 22:26:53 UTC

Hi! You have a new rabid fan, and I hope you continue this series. ^_^ I especially love your portrayal of Shatterstar's lack of understanding of earthy things. (BTW - What Happened in Mexico and Footsteps in the Desert rocked so hard.)

naiveprophet March 12 2008, 02:16:55 UTC

Oh, yay! My spring break is (finally) coming up, and I have goals to finish at least one of my WIPs--most likely either the next Earth-Shattering, or the next in the What Happened in Mexico series. ^^

skysong6161 March 12 2008, 03:02:53 UTC

Awsome! I can't wait. I wiggle with joy (because those two are the quitissential "this is how Shatterstar/Rictor should be done. With lots of awkardness and angst."