Fire Emblem 8 - Seth/Eirika - The Dark of the Sea, a Sea of Poppies

[nagasasu]

Title: The Dark of the Sea, a Sea of Poppies
Rating: PG
Summary: She asks to see the wound in the sunlight, the moonlight, and in a time that is neither quite sunset nor sunrise.
Word Count: 1332

Started: June 16, 2009
Completed: February 6, 2010
Posted: February 7, 2010
Last Edited: March 16, 2010

Author’s Note: Written for fe_contest ; prompt #2, wounds. The

Comments

[sarajayechan]

Aww. I love the subtlety here. :D And Eirika's little "Ephraim used to kiss my wounds" comment was full of awkward cute.

[nagasasu]

Thank you! Haha, awkward cute was what (I think) I was going for there too. :)

[nagasasu]

I guess it's that they're "forbidden"? Haha. A character study, huh? I tend to do stuff with my writing I don't mean to do. XD Thank you!

[hooves]

This was exceptional, to say the least. I wish that I could find the right words, but I can't. Just know that this is amazing.

[nagasasu]

Thank you. This put a large smile on my face. :)

[wolfraven80]

Oh man it's so rare that I get to read really good Seth/Eirika. Pardon me while I melt into a puddle of goo. Hold on, I'll get back to you in a sec...

...

Okay. I've reassembled myself. Here we go...

I love that you didn't feel bound to dialogue from the game. You use bits of it but don't chain yourself to it like newbie authors sometimes end up doing. And some of the lines really got to me -- like how Seth is helpless before the look in her eyes and how affected he is by her touch, and how he realises that she's going to be "devastating" when she's older. And the bit about Ephraim kissing her hurts -- that was adorable. Poor Seth! lol

Oh and this:
"he doesn’t ever know what to think when he is alone with her."

The final scene was touching as well. I wish I could be more articulate, but I just really enjoyed reading this -- it was such a treat! I'm so glad you posted it.

[nagasasu]

Squee! Thank you! <3 Reviews like this make me want to write more stuff.

"but don't chain yourself to it like newbie authors sometimes end up doing"
LOL, I totally did that in my earlier stuff.

Thanks for pointing out specific stuff, especially since most of those were lines I'm fond of. :)

I take it you liked that line?

Thank you so much again~!

[aquatic_lily]

Love the subtlety of this piece. As well as the awkwardness that hangs in the air between the two, but the piece had a trail of romantic suspense going throughout it too. Which came together in a sweet climax. I absolutely love the line 'You and I,” she continues, “are not that different at all.' because it's true! It was a stroke of genius to have Seth touch Eirika's scar - as Seth's wound is an important thing in their support conversation, I think.

[nagasasu]

Thank you! And thanks for mentioning that specific bit; it's helpful as a writer. :)

I was wondering where you went; I haven't heard from you in awhile! How are you doing? :)