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[naddanadda]

I.
If I walk too slowly or too quickly I will see him
And a new her, not me
I’ll pace it perfect, timed so I won’t see him
Seeing me
Seeing them
II.
If I walk too slowly or too quickly I won’t see her
And she’ll never notice me
I’ll pace it perfect; eyes will tell that I see her
Seeing me
Seeing us

Comments

[racingraindrops]

i like these but at the same time i know that the feeling behind them sucks :(
if it counts for anything i think you're better. and you can do better, even though it may not feel like it/you may not realize it right now.
we should chat sometime soon :( i miss seeing you every day!

[naddanadda]

actually i am much better. this wasn't really a 'oh, sad me' poem
but i wrote it in response to billy collins' "embrace" for english (see lit book).
it's about different points of view. the second part is narrated by a different boy seeing the same girl who narrated part one. so really it's quite a hopeful poem.

[racingraindrops]

aaaaaaaaaand this is why i dont analyze poetry hahaha.
well i like it, a lot :)

[naddanadda]

haha thanks mindy.
and i miss seeing you everyday too. :)

[chiclettgurl]

I LOVE your poem. its absolutely amazing and perfect :)

[naddanadda]

thanks, tally :)