...attended by these glowing ghosts within the timeless matter of eternity...

[naboru_narluin]

Well, that happens if I think about space and stuff. I wrote it in German in my journal and typed it now, also translated it.

Pictures of the raw journal version under the cut

Comments

[ultharkitty]

Gorgeous :D (and I love seeing aliens that are truly alien) The rhythm of this part is just perfect: with a melancholic wailing and a happy sung farewell.

That was just the right image to head to sleep reading! It's a vivid image, although probably not one which I could committ to paper, sadly!

[naboru_narluin]

*glomps* Thanks for reading. :D So glad you liked it. It was more a test, because despite that I like the second person POV, I usually have problems to write it. v.v

And that is one of my favourite parts, too. And the part in the header (though the header part more when it's in German.)

*hugs* I hope you had nice dreams after that. *lol*

[ultharkitty]

Yeah, the second person is hard to write in :S But this works :D

The line that's in the header is also very cool.

Re. dreams, they were certainly better than the night before. I dreamed about loads of people I know irl playing badminton together, and my ex boyfriend and someone else where there and broke their left ankles, only their feet fell off, it was weird. O_o Kinda funny, too, but really odd.

[artemis10002000]

Das ist wunderschön geschrieben und ich bewundere Deine bildhafte Sprache. Du schaffst es wirklich, dass ich ein Bild im Kopf habe von der Szene.

[naboru_narluin]

:D Danke fürs Lesen. *hugs* Ich freu mich wirklich, dass es dir gefällt, gerade weil es eher ne Übung war. Ich mag die Perspektive der 2. Pers. Singular total, aber ich hab immer Probleme es zu schreiben. Deswegen freu ich mich grad noch mehr das du meintest du konntest es dir vorstellen. :D

[artemis10002000]

2. Person passt hier perfekt! Ich hab noch nie versucht, darin zu schreiben, aber so, wie Du es rüberbringst, hab ich Lust bekommen, es auch mal zu probieren.