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Fic: Primatech 815 - Ch. 14

Nov 24, 2009 11:54

Title: Primatech 815
Author: starrdust411
Fandom: Heroes (Crossover with Lost)
Characters: Ando, Bennet, Claire, Claude, Hiro, Isaac, Peter, Matt, Micah, Mohinder, Niki, Simone, Sylar (more to come)
Rating: R
Summary: A plane crash unites a group of strangers.
Disclaimer: I do not own Heroes or Lost.
Warnings: AU, Violence, Action/Adventure, Drug use, Het, ( Read more... )

character: micah, character: claude, character: isaac, character: claire, character: niki, genre: au, genre: angst, rating: r, genre: crossover, character: noah bennet, character: peter, character: matt, fic

Comments 6

levitatethis November 24 2009, 18:57:23 UTC

Oh no! What happened to Mohinder?!

I like how you've taken an almost domestic squabble between he and Sylar and given it even more importance by the situation they're in. So something relatively inconsequential ends up speaking about their personal relationship, how they see it, how others see it, the way it will impact their time on the island and the motivation to get off of it. I particularly like that there's a certain vulnerability to Sylar during the fight (as he admits that others have thought they were a couple) and then later one when they've parted ways we see that caring side of Mohinder, the one that doesn't take pleasure in Sylar being upset but sees it as both a potential problem and can feel slightly bad about the way the fight went.

As usual I'm liking how you're fleshing out the characters (like Isaac) and having them interact...even something small like Claire noticing how hard Simone is working, helping her try to get to Peter and Isaac, makes these new relationships jump off the screen more.

starrdust411 November 24 2009, 19:17:51 UTC

I'm glad you liked Mohinder's side of this chapter, because I was worried I made him seem to uptight/bitchy, especially since I waited so long to do this scene. It was one of the things that made me want to write this crossover lol.

I'm also happy to hear you like how I've fleshed out Isaac. I've never done anything with him before, and I was worried I was getting him all wrong. But that's what makes this series so challenging, trying to write all these characters that I've either never touched on or only reference in other fics.

Thank you for the feed back. I really apperciate it :D

Something new! zagethe November 24 2009, 19:09:19 UTC

I havent been following this because I dont normally read crossovers but this chapter has interested me so I'm going back and read your story from the beginning. I think I'm gonna like it :)

Re: Something new! starrdust411 November 24 2009, 19:18:17 UTC

LOL. I hope you do :D

hopefulwriter27 November 25 2009, 04:18:05 UTC

Oh no! Momo!Cuddles him close. Poor guy is always getting beat up. Though sometimes I think he's asking for it. ;)

Great chapter!

starrdust411 November 25 2009, 12:56:09 UTC

He's just too darn pretty. Everyone's jealous :P

Thank you for reading. :D