Comments | my_young_friend: Treatment, PG-13, White Collar

my_young_friend

Treatment, PG-13, White Collar

Jul 25, 2010 19:31

Title: Treatment ( Read more... )

white collar, fic, one shot

Comments 8

kelly_girl July 25 2010, 19:56:38 UTC

Interesting fic. Loved that last line.

my_young_friend July 25 2010, 20:00:16 UTC

Thanks! Glad the re-hashing of the Submissive!Neal meme didn't rankle too much.

daria234 July 26 2010, 04:46:18 UTC

Great one - I think Neal absolutely did that. I love how painful Neal's choices were for what he wanted 'Peter' to say -angsty but so realistic. Also, HOT. Love the fic!

my_young_friend July 26 2010, 06:27:24 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

igoformerlot July 27 2010, 02:02:47 UTC

Nice unexpected twist(s)! Your quality writing makes the whole thing very plausible indeed.

my_young_friend July 27 2010, 06:26:29 UTC

Thank you, you're very kind.

karaokegal June 13 2011, 15:56:02 UTC

This is delicious. I like the idea of Neal knowing he needs some "sub" time, but still controlling it, which is the essence of the idea that the sub IS always in control of the scene and this sort of makes it explicit that the Dom is also the slave. Very clever. I took would LOVE to know June's connection to the whole set-up.

my_young_friend June 13 2011, 19:15:27 UTC

Thank you. I always had a little backstory in my head that Byron was a big mob-boss (or the like) who had a sub-side that he needed to keep secret, and that's how she knew about the place.

...the sub IS always in control of the scene...

That's EXACTLY what I was trying to convey. I'm glad it came across.