Mischief Managed ♦ Fic: another small piece of proof

[mischief_mods]

Title: another small piece of proof
Author: forsanethaec
Pairing: Remus/Sirius
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1,760
Prompt: #122
Warnings: angst; rating is for sensuality/non-sexual nudity
Summary: After Azkaban, it's not enough to have a life again; Sirius has also got to
learn to live it.
Author's Notes: I don't really have my timeline together canonically, but I

Comments

[perilousgard]

The language in this was perfect. You portrayed the emotion between the two amazingly. I particularly like the section where Remus is cutting Sirius's hair and that just stirs memories. And the hesitation. Just...a lovely bit of writing, overall. :D

[sukebe_miroku]

You said what I was thinking, only better. (D: Get outta my heaaaad!) I agree, your vocabulary made me cry (Well, almost) Beautiful piece~ :3

[forsanethaec]

don't cry! :) words are nice. thank you so much for reading!

[forsanethaec]

oh, thank you :D i do so appreciate it.

[liebedance]

This was quite lovely. I really like the writing style -- it's unique and evoking. It felt very quiet, which is not usually how one pictures Remus and Sirius (esp not Sirius). But it felt really real, too.

As black_pawprints said, the symbolism with the water overflowing in the bathtub was brill :)

[forsanethaec]

thank you!! i agree that it's quieter than even i picture them, but i'd never worked in this period before and it felt like it should be different from my norm... anyway, i'm so glad it worked for you :)

[museme87]

What stunned me about this piece was the imagery, similes, and metaphors, mystery author. I've never seen someone use them so heavily and yet their fic reads so smoothly and lightly. It's just really beautifully done, and that's going to stick with me for a long while.

The story, especially Sirius, was fantastic. Remus and Sirius were perfect, and you've navigated the Lie Low era with a sort of flawless precision. I can imagine things unfolding this way.

[forsanethaec]

*sigh* thank you so much. it's my constant quest to try to pile those on without overdoing it. i'm so glad you found there to be a balance here. and it's so wonderful to hear the era worked well, it's my first time writing it! thank you for this lovely comment ♥

[escribo]

This is lovely and sweet and sad and I'm so glad they kiss in the end.

[forsanethaec]

me too! :D thank you so much for reading.

[lovely_seraph]

This was really pretty. I especially loved the end. It made me feel all warm and cozy ^^

[forsanethaec]

yay, thank you! i appreciate it.