Mmm... I disagree with some of your verb tenses. :)
I'd go with:
The local birds Sing in this (I'll buy farmland, I don't know the word) And I know, from their song, That nothing is lacking From the happiness of their fires. They have tasted before me The fruits of constancy Perhaps when better treated They are more loverly.
Why envy them Their just recompense? Love does not offend me When it renders the lovers so happy.
I think to redouble, By my own impatience, The gentle pleasure That will follow my vows.
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I'd go with:
The local birds
Sing in this (I'll buy farmland, I don't know the word)
And I know, from their song,
That nothing is lacking
From the happiness of their fires.
They have tasted before me
The fruits of constancy
Perhaps when better treated
They are more loverly.
Why envy them
Their just recompense?
Love does not offend me
When it renders the lovers so happy.
I think to redouble,
By my own impatience,
The gentle pleasure
That will follow my vows.
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