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Drabble D: Doll

Feb 26, 2011 11:34

Title: Playing Hard To Get
Rating: K+
Genre: Humor, Romance
Cu/Au: Cu
Pairings or Characters: Kasanoda, Hikaru, Kaoru, Haruhi, Usa-chan, Hunny. Hintings of Kasanoda/Haruhi
Warnings: None. Oh wait, one swear word. Yeah.
Summary: Ritsu Kasanoda is taking the initiative. He's gonna ask Fujioka out.

( Playing Hard To Get )

drabble d: doll, author: violetcharms

Comments 10

grim_dreamer February 26 2011, 20:22:02 UTC

Heh, I just woke up, and this is the first piece of text I've laid my eyes on. Probably the first drabble to feature practically nothing but dialogue, too.

Strangely, it works! I thought it was a really good use of the prompt and managed to successfully include almost all of the Host Club (how you managed to divert Tamaki is a feat to be marvelled).

Anyway, it was a good portrayal of the awkward relationship between Kasanoda and Haruhi. I get the impression that you like Kasanoda a lot - yay for minor characters!

I have nothing to really say in terms on constructive criticism except for the rating: you might want to pump it up to "K+" or even "T" if the use of the "H" word really bothers you.

violetcharms February 26 2011, 20:26:03 UTC

Oh wow, thanks! Yeah, this piece was actually out of my comfort zone a bit. I usually write Tamaki and Kyouya, with some Haruhi, so using minor characters... is scary. O.O But I'm glad you seemed to like it!

And in regards to 'hell' - I don't really mind it, I almost flippantly use it, but I realized that others... might mind? ^^

enigmaticrose4 February 26 2011, 20:57:40 UTC

Hehe, that was quite funny. I'm glad we have another entry, hopefully we'll get at least one more *eyes grim* before tonight. I think you did a great job moving out of your comfort zone. Sorry this is so short. I need to go clock back in now.

You should write more Kassanoda, you're good with him.

violetcharms March 1 2011, 21:22:53 UTC

Thank you so much! ^_^

nimash_123 February 26 2011, 22:42:05 UTC

I agree with grim_dreamer and engimaticcrose4; you're extremely talented at portraying Kasanoda. It's good to step out of your comfort zone once in a while, it helps with other works.

Nice use of the prompt. I have to say that a pet name wasn't the first thing that came to mind when I saw "doll", so I like the creativity. (It was creative to me, at least.)

violetcharms March 1 2011, 21:24:02 UTC

Oh gosh, people seem to think I'm good with Kasanoda.

**has barely written anything for him**

**feels pressured to write more about him**

...

**thinks his hair is cool**

Thank you so much! I was trying to think of a way to use 'doll', but not too... obviously, so I'm glad it worked!

nicluv1787 February 27 2011, 00:36:45 UTC

This was utterly brilliant. Poor bossanova, he tries so hard.

I was wondering when Hikaru was being so helpful what was going on then I caught on when they started giving him nicknames to call Haruhi.

Haruhi's reaction was spot on. I can completely imagine that type of moment happening in the cannon.

violetcharms March 1 2011, 21:24:21 UTC

Thank you so much! ^_^

socialsafari March 1 2011, 06:10:24 UTC

Ha ha! This was great. The twins are my favorite and I love how they can outsmart anyone, expect maybe Kyouya. Great dialogue, and I had no problem following the back-and-forth among them. I could easily imagine them talking in circles around Kasanoda, and I laughed when they called him a pervert. I also liked the structure and pacing of your story. And nice twist at the end.

violetcharms March 1 2011, 21:24:56 UTC

Thank you! I was worried about the rapid-fire-twin-speak, but I'm glad you thought it worked! ^_^