fic: The other foot, obliquely run (Firefly, SERENITY [movie] SPOILERS)

[musesfool]

Unbetaed, so it may change. If you wanna give it a once-over, that'd be grand, as I'm not sure I have Mal right. Or Zoe, either.

Title (and cut tag quote) from "A Valediction, Forbidding Mourning" by John Donne. Yes, again. Shut up. It's one of my all-time favoritest poems ever.

This story is post-Serenity (the movie) and it contains MAJOR

Comments

[celli]

I think you've got Mal to a T here, particularly in the scene with Inara. I'm not as sure about Zoe, just because she's harder for me to figure out in general. I do like her "You can't take it from me"--that works really well.

[musesfool]

Thanks! I'm glad Mal works - he's the only Firefly character I ever feel quite comfortable writing, for some reason (probably because I see him as a variation on Xander). I have definitely have a hard time feeling Zoe.

[barbed_whispers]

I really liked this. The tone was perfect, and the dialogue was spot-on. I was a little annoyed with the abruptness of his death, but this is good closure for it.

[musesfool]

Thank you!

I had been spoiled, unfortunately, and while I'm a little upset at his death, the manner of it worked for me, I guess. It was so shocking, and then no one had any time to deal with it... I think I was kind of numb through the rest of the movie. sigh.

[jo_ellen]

I'm a cheater. I haven't seen Serenity. Your fic rocks, though. Wow.

[musesfool]

Thank you!

And in September, you should totally see it, if there isn't a NYC advance screening.

[titti]

You're making me read het. That's not right. :P

Seriously though, this works on so many levels. I think you've captured Zoe really well, doing what must be done but without the smile. I've always seen Wash as the one to make her more 'human' and less military. Also the anger that boils over and she reaches for comfort feels very real. Zoe would only accept the comfort from Mal, I think.

The scene between Mal and Inara made me smile. Mal will never get it right when it comes to her. LOL

[musesfool]

Hee! Thanks!

It's only kinda het. And there was some possibility of femslash thrown in... *g*

I'm glad you think it works, though, especially Zoe, because I'm never sure of how to write her at all.

I've always seen Wash as the one to make her more 'human' and less military.

*nod nod*

Exactly.

Zoe would only accept the comfort from Mal, I think.

Yeah, I think she's a little angry that he sent someone else to do the job when he should have come himself.

The scene between Mal and Inara made me smile. Mal will never get it right when it comes to her.

Woo! I'm glad that worked. I do think he's never gonna get it right there, and I don't mind at all.

[centricity]

I'm commenting with my eyes closed, just so you know.

I hate you. Just a little, though, and only because I'm jealous and the stupidstupidstupid preview was sold out before I could get off work to get tickets. So, I can't read your fic, even though I want to, because I haven't seen the movie yet, and want to unspoiled.

Everywhere I go online tonight, there are discussions I have to steer away from, and I'm feeling alone and sad and anxious because--God!--September!!So, I'm heaving a big sigh, and going away now, because otherwise I'll be tempted, and I'll read it regardless, and I'll cry because I know I don't want to know, and arg! I've almost talked myself into it anyway, yeah

[musesfool]

Heh. You're good. I tried very hard not to get spoiled - I exerted some excellent will-power, and then it all went to waste when I was inadvertantly spoiled by an ETA on someone's post when I was commenting. I was very angry.

Believe me, it's better not being spoiled.

A while back, didn't you rec a Narnia/HP crossover where Susan Pevensie was Lily's and Petunia's mother? Where is that?

Here you go:

The Made-Up Things by chaos_pockets.

Thank copperbadge - I couldn't remember who wrote it or what it was called, just that I'd followed a rec from his LJ, and he dug up the link. *g*

I don't want to know who dies. I don't. I'm just dying of curiosity, but I don't want to know. At all. Until September.

Who said anybody dies?

*blinks*

[centricity]

Thank copperbadge - I couldn't remember who wrote it or what it was called, just that I'd followed a rec from his LJ, and he dug up the link.

I'll thank you first for going through the trouble. I really appreciate it. I loved this, and wanted to send the link to a RL friend that just revealed her deep, dark fangirlness. She mostly reads Ron/Hermione, she says, but I'll woo her with good slash and interesting trios.

Who said anybody dies?
No one said that, and no one dies. No one at all. I've convinced myself of this fact. [nods vigorously] I imagined or misread anything I (mis)read last night and have no (NO!) interest in correcting myself. That's my (self-deluded) story, and I'm ... mostly sticking to it.

[musesfool]

She mostly reads Ron/Hermione, she says, but I'll woo her with good slash and interesting trios.

Heh. I like a good Ron/Hermione on occasion. I do ship them, after all. I just prefer it when Harry's there, too. *G*

I imagined or misread anything I (mis)read last night and have no (NO!) interest in correcting myself.

Eek! I'm sorry if you were spoiled. I was spoiled and it sucks.