fic: One More Mile (first draft)

[musesfool]

So I was taking a break from writing, and reading fic and answering comments etc. instead, right?

Not so much, apparently.

Comments

[maidenjedi]

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That was probably the best look at the decision to make Peter the Secret-Keeper I've ever read. It's tight and frightening and SO SAD. I wanted to scream at Sirius for being a bloody stupid git the entire time. Wow, Vic. Seriously good stuff.

[musesfool]

Thanks so much! I'm so happy you think it works, because it's one of those huge things I wish we knew more about - how Sirius approached James and Lily with it, their initial reactions, etc. because I have such a hard time with Lily agreeing to it. Of course, knowing Peter's the traitor is what makes it so hard to believe, I guess... Anyhow, thank you.

[musesfool]

I'm sure it's deeply wrong that my first instinct was to shout, "This is not my beautiful house! This is not my beautiful wife!"

Oh god, I didn't even think of that until you mentioned it. Too bad I don't still have my Sirius-"My God, what have I done?" icon in rotation. *G*

Lovely and gutwrenching.... thanks for the recs, too.

Thank you! And you're welcome. *G*

[musesfool]

Heh. They do.

I have a whole set of icons to it. All my fannish men. *G*

[aidenfire]

How come your first drafts are better than fics I work on for weeks? Seriously, that was incredible. Probably one of the best looks into the dynamics of the mauraders right before the seceret keeping. Hmm. I just typed that and thougt. There really was a lot of secert keeping in that time. Anyway, great great GREAT job. Just--whoa.

[musesfool]

How come your first drafts are better than fics I work on for weeks?

Practice? *g*

Seriously, that was incredible. Probably one of the best looks into the dynamics of the mauraders right before the seceret keeping.

Thank you so much. I'm so happy you thought it rang true.

There really was a lot of secert keeping in that time.

Oh yes. So many secrets - and who keeps them and who tells them - and so much trouble because of them.

[sheafrotherdon]

Oh God, that was so good it hurts.

I want it to be utterly impossible for them to suspect Remus . . . but since that can't be, I'd like to smack Wormtail into the very dirt. You wrote him beautifully -- malevolent self-interest and schoolboy grudges turned inward. So compelling.

(and thank you for the recs!)

[musesfool]

Thanks so much!

I want it to be utterly impossible for them to suspect Remus . . . but since that can't be, I'd like to smack Wormtail into the very dirt.

I know! It makes me go, Sirius, you eediot! But then I think of Remus's tendency to withhold information and Wormtail was probably very quick to spill poison in Sirius's ear about him, and it was a whole big mess.

I'm so glad you thought Peter worked. I have such a hard time with him. On the one hand, I do think he probably felt bad about selling James out. On the other, it was him or James, and it wasn't going to be him, you know?

(and thank you for the recs!)

You're welcome! Write more. *G*

[cantabile]

Oh wow. It's like you've taken the words/ideas straight from the inventor of the Universe. It fits so well into place with the little we know, leaves no 'what if's', or other questions hanging for answer. Wonderful. Sad.

Lily leaning against James chest and saying she trusts him ... just wow.

[musesfool]

Wow. Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it.