Fic: Five Minutes, Forty-Six Seconds

[museme87]

Title: Five Minutes, Forty-Six Seconds
Author: museme87
Pairing: Brian/Justin
Rating: R
Wordcount: 785
Warnings: takes place during the bashing, language, explicit descriptions
Summary: He'll later find out that it took five minutes, forty-six seconds for the ambulance to arrive, but for Brian it felt like a lifetime.
Author's Note: The idea for this fic

Comments

[justsoqueer]

It's...wow...it's amazing. It's very intense and the writing is powerful. I know it's not your normal style, but it's good none the less. You should do more of this from-the-gut-POV more often, hon.
Ans the angst! Oh, the angst! I really loved it. And the idea of the date was a good one, really. It sounds so in character it's unbelievable!
You, little genius! <3

[museme87]

Thank you, babe! As long as you and Ria like it, I like it. I was a touch worried last night after I posted it.

"They're going to think I'm nuts. What is this?" LOL

It's definitely fun to write in this style, but there's a lot of rehashing too, like the time and the blood in this one. It's all Brian can really focus on. I guess as long as you read it accepting that Brian is in shock and not in his right mind, it'll be fine. :)

I'm not sure what other scene would demand this sort of from-the-gut POV. Maybe the bombing. Hmm, I'd have to think about it!

Also, I really sort of want to write the date as a sequel to this fic, hehe. It would definitely be a challenge to get it to work and be in character, but it's possible.

[trintiff]

This is brilliant! And, it couldn't have been "eloquent" because there was nothing eloquent about that scene. It was raw and terrifying and you captured it beautifully!

Hugs, Cindy

[museme87]

Thank you so much, Cindy!

[galehot]

Wow, so intense!!
My heart was unable to beat until the end. It broke my soul.

Good job.

[museme87]

Thanks!

[duffy_60]

what an amazing piece of writing, sweetie. one of the best i've read written about that moment. damn!!

[museme87]

Thank you, dear! I'm flattered you think so highly of it.

[bksbracelet]

OMG that was so powerful I actually teared up with emotion

[museme87]

I'm glad it had an impact! Thank you for reading. :)