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Stag & Doe Comment Ficathon

Aug 05, 2011 17:35

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Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 7 2011, 13:17:34 UTC

It's short and dirty, and not quite what I originally had in mind, but I hope you like it!

Lily hummed along to the music on the radio, her body swaying to the beat. Revelling in the way the air caressed her skin, she was in no hurry to don her clothing. It was hot enough to go without, and she wasn’t expecting anyone. With that freeing knowledge in mind. She danced her way around her small apartment, picking up the scraps of parchment that needed to be sorted out.

As it happened, she was so engrossed in the music, she almost didn’t hear the telltale ‘pop’. The sound took a moment to register, but the moment it did, she fled to the bedroom, slamming the door shut on whoever it was who had apparated into her apartment so rudely.

Throwing on a shirt and a pair of jeans before gripping her wand tightly, she yanked the door open once more, prepared to hex whoever it was on the other side. And she would have, too, had the someone not been a certain James Potter, a very satisfied grin decorating his face ( ... )

Re: Nothing at All (PG) museme87 August 7 2011, 14:34:19 UTC

Oh my god, that conversation! James is completely perfect and mischievous, and Lily is so short tempered and embarrassed. This is such a cute scene and works beautifully with the prompt!

Re: Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 8 2011, 06:32:06 UTC

Why thank you! :)

Re: Nothing at All (PG) liebedance August 7 2011, 15:05:47 UTC

Haha. I liked the bit of mischievousness in James' dialogue!

Re: Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 8 2011, 06:32:42 UTC

Glad you liked it!

Re: Nothing at All (PG) peskywhistpaw August 7 2011, 15:25:40 UTC

LOL! That very last line is killer. And I can just imagine James's expression throughout. Very funny!

Re: Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 8 2011, 06:33:36 UTC

Thoroughly 'cat with the cream', no? And only getting worse and worse :P

Re: Nothing at All (PG) starry_laa August 7 2011, 19:35:30 UTC

Haha, this was hilarious and fantastic! Loved the last two lines.

Re: Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 8 2011, 06:33:59 UTC

Thank you, they were fun to write :)

Re: Nothing at All (PG) con_spire August 7 2011, 23:02:11 UTC

Oh, James, you smarmy git. You got the characterization down pat in such a short piece! Absolutely adorable prompt response.

Re: Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 8 2011, 06:34:35 UTC

Thank you.

I was definitely thinking 'incorrigible' :P

Re: Nothing at All (PG) eprime August 8 2011, 19:16:19 UTC

Hahaha. Talk about the need for constant vigilance. ;)

Re: Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 9 2011, 12:52:15 UTC

Especially with James as a boyfriend ;)

Re: Nothing at All (PG) iltash August 9 2011, 06:55:28 UTC

Silly Lily, doesn't she know to always expect someone? Especially with James Potter as a boyfriend. I loved James in this, acting all cool.

Re: Nothing at All (PG) kazzamoonshadow August 9 2011, 12:13:28 UTC

Exactly. Potter simply can't be trusted to stay away, even if he says he has to :)

Re: Nothing at All (PG) zia_montrose August 22 2011, 03:24:42 UTC

Wow, I'm really loving these drabbles so far and this one is no exception. Your writing is really beautiful, especially here. Revelling in the way the air caressed her skin, she was in no hurry to don her clothing. It was hot enough to go without, and she wasn’t expecting anyone.

Gotta love cocky James and an outsmarted Lily. : )

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