The first thing I thought was...wow. That's creepy. Because the way you started off? And the colours mentioned in the first two paragraphs? I wrote a fic with a similar feeling and mood but which had no point whatsoever and was bad, so it's never been posted.
It is certainly...depressing. And I don't think it quite the same life your other writing does. But I have this insane sort of love for the colours that you used in this piece, and the imagery. Oddly enough, they don't match at all, but it creates a contrast that i really like. So, overall, fledgling rating says: GREAT! XD
Really? You did? (Can I see it?) And no it doesn't. It doesn't have life. I wrote it during my blinded period (hence the blindness). It's very... rough. Which is way unlike most of my work. I love it, and I hate it. *Sighs*
And...you really want to see it? Really really? Really? XD I like the imagery, but apart from that, it just...there's NO point to it. 'Twas inspired by the lovely song you can find...ehh, somewhere in the nana_takoyakis group called 'Utahime' by (dammit, I forgot her name). Because I think the lyrics (though they are translated into english) are just so lovely and poetic.
Yay! And of course I want to see it! And could you send the song too, maybe? If you have it. Whenever we do this song thing we've been talking about. ^_^
This is great. It's like you've given colors and an image to apathy. The contrast between the feeling you project out of 'blindness'and indifference --if this is 'rough'work --put away the polish! JILL
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The first thing I thought was...wow. That's creepy. Because the way you started off? And the colours mentioned in the first two paragraphs? I wrote a fic with a similar feeling and mood but which had no point whatsoever and was bad, so it's never been posted.
It is certainly...depressing. And I don't think it quite the same life your other writing does. But I have this insane sort of love for the colours that you used in this piece, and the imagery. Oddly enough, they don't match at all, but it creates a contrast that i really like. So, overall, fledgling rating says: GREAT! XD
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But anyways, thank you for reading it, love!
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And...you really want to see it? Really really? Really? XD I like the imagery, but apart from that, it just...there's NO point to it. 'Twas inspired by the lovely song you can find...ehh, somewhere in the nana_takoyakis group called 'Utahime' by (dammit, I forgot her name). Because I think the lyrics (though they are translated into english) are just so lovely and poetic.
I'll send the fic to you.
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