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[muggy_mountain]

Title:Sides
Fandom:FFX
Characters:Kinoc, Seymour (mention of Braska, Auron, Jecht and Jyscal)
Rating:G
Notes:For owlmoose, who requested Kinoc, post-Braska pilgrimage and pre-game. This is shortly after Seymour's exile was revoked. Feedback of all kinds happily accepted. I haven't done any fandom since like MARCH, guys. I'm sorry I fail at fandom, but

Comments

[owlmoose]

Ooh nice. I really like how you sow the seeds of alliance and rivalry, and of Seymour's madness. And the details of Kinoc's fascination/repulsion with Seymour's Guado ancestry -- the hands, the hair, the stinky fruit. The ending is great.

Thank you for this! :)

[lassarina]

Basically I am in full agreement with this. :)

[auronlu]

Yay! You found fandom!

This is twitchy strange, good, and I love the way Kinoc gives politically correct answers and Seymour keeps calling him on it.

The description of Seymour's hands and the constant reference to tree-stuff is great world-rooting description. (pun intended.)

At first I was going to critique Seymour's speech about the Farplane, because it's missing his suave turns of phrase-- in fact he sounds a little choppy in spots, not elegant, seductive. But of course! He's still petulant, and we saw him as a boy being a nervous, whiny brat with no eloquence at all. He must've learned it!

Kinoc here is surprisingly likeable, a glimpse of the practical, good man that Auron called a friend.

[muggy_mountain]

Hah, thanks!

But of course! He's still petulant, and we saw him as a boy being a nervous, whiny brat with no eloquence at all. He must've learned it!

I actually had the same concerns as I was writing this --I had to keep replacing the older, elegant Seymour in my head with a boy who was ten years younger. I tried to give him that lazy-charming majesty to introduce him, but he's really wrapped up in these ideas --that madness-- that he's forming. He hopes desperately Kinoc, with his connection to the summoner and his guardian, would know something, so he lets that slip a bit.

[animecrush]

As soon as I saw 'Seymour' in the cast listing I had to read it. I think you did a good job of representing him and I agree with the comments above that you voiced Seymour well and even though he is not as 'suave' as he is later on, he still shows a lot of his bitterness towards his guado heritage (which he'd natually learn to mask after time).

Also I like the little notes about Kinoc's unease, the strange fruit, and the Farplane. I thought it was a really nice fic. ^^

[muggy_mountain]

I'm glad you like it. You're the top Seymour expert, in my mind. :)

[siva630]

I LIKE THIS. I've always been interested in portraying Kinoc and Seymour pre-game but I've never managed to hit the right note. You give good characterisations here; the interaction feels perfectly spiky & with forced politeness.

(You also wrote a very good line when Kinoc compares Seymour's mixed heritage to the relationahips between Braska and his Al Bhed wife [did she have a name?]. I never thought of that! I was then thinking: this could be one of the factors that draws Seymour and Yuna together; their ability to cross racial divides and act as effective uniting figureheads for Spira. Surely they both must have faced some sort of stigma because of their heritage.)

[muggy_mountain]

YOU WANT TO WRITE KINOC AND SEYMOUR?

...

KEEP TRYING PLZ.

i want to read that.

/Founding Member of Loyal Order of the Kinoc

There's a lot of nice parallels between Yuna and Seymour, I'd like to see a ship manifesto those justifications written from Seymour's point of view. His craziness is actually frighteningly logical, considering the in-world logic of the game.

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[kunstarniki]

Beautifully conceived and executed. I enjoyed this very much and found particular pleasure in the delicate attention you pay to the gestures and body language of the young Seymour. I had not considered what he must have been like when young and you have given me much to think about. The interplay between the two is both believable and trenchant. It goes a long way toward explaining how they each became what they were later. Kinoc is already the plotter, the spider in his web.

You have a great gift for description and for creating atmosphere. It is good to have you working again.

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[muggy_mountain]

Thank you! I hadn't considered Seymour at this age until writing this. Kinoc is one of my favorite foil characters and it seemed likely enough that their paths would cross around this time, so it seemed like a good fit.

I'm glad to see you use a Seymour icon, I don't think I've seen that one yet.