Last Chance Idol #1, In The Garden

[muchtooarrogant]

I didn't want to open the last drawer. Like the ones that had come before, it would contain memories from a happier time, a particleboard fortress reluctantly disgorging items that would have to be examined, remembered, and finally placed into one of two piles, keep or discard. I surveyed the two piles in question, patiently awaiting new

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[witchwife]

Well done! The bit about the tape was definitely my favourite part. As was - what seems will be - a happy ending. Happy to see your writing again!

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! That little tape section tried its best to take over the whole story, and I had to keep telling it, "No, it's about the garden, behave!"

In my mind, I picture Jessie and John getting a divorce in pretty short order, which I wouldn't say is much of a happy ending for the kid, although I must admit it's certainly better than being abandoned or time paradoxed out of existence.

Dan

[khixan]

that was really cool to read, thanks!

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! It's nice to know that there's some cross-over appeal for non-Idol participants. :)

Which you want more, a small screw driver set to take apart cassettes, or a grape arbor for your back yard?

Dan

[khixan]

I have plenty of small screwdrivers to no one's surprise, and the grape arbor - yeah, that would turn black and die merely being in my prescience for too long LOL

[muchtooarrogant]

Hahaha, you might be surprised, grapes are tough. My dad planted some vines when I was a kid, and they always produced grapes, even though I don't remember us watering them or anything. Of course, dad probably did, I was a bit oblivious to stuff like that.

Dan

[n3m3sis43]

Nice to see you back! This had a very wistful feel to it. I was confused about the part with Stewart and having to think about the future... is Jessie cheating or does John just suspect she is/will?

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! Whistful was definitely what I was aiming for, so I'm glad that came through.

Yeah, when I reread this after posting, I sorta wished I had made Stewart's role a little clearer. He's Jessie's boss, and my intent was for her "future" comment to be a bit ambiguous, "Is she talking about work or in a romantic sense?" Were I permitted to edit, I'd probably add a phrase or two there to flesh out that interchange a bit. Yes, John believes she is cheating on him, but even if she isn't, it seems likely that their marriage won't survive much longer.

Thanks again.

Dan

[vik_thor]

neat story.

yeah, I see a divorce soon. hopefully the kid will get to stay with her father.

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! After finishing this, I thought a bit about either writing Jessie's side of the story, or letting the reader in on what her choice was. Sequels don't always do well in Idol-land though, so we'll see. :)

Dan

[kickthehobbit]

Oh, nice!

[muchtooarrogant]

Why thank you! :) Glad you liked. The cassette tape riff and the fight were easy, but I had to rewrite the garden scene like five times before it had the tone I wanted.

Dan

[kickthehobbit]

It paid off-this is really lovely! Glad to see you back. :)