[1/2] Stanza of Truth

[mubblebizh]

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[mubblebizh]

for espressoluv sally bb~

whoaa I finished it dear!! kinda like a miracle among all the exams xD

hope u enjoy :)

[mubblebizh]

whoaaaaa~~ u claimed your spotto in here also, I'm happy :))

and thats quote! I love when ppl do it! thanks sweetie ♥
actually I took the fragrance description from armani site lol
and I think chunnie suit that scent, dont u think? xDD

*munching on the cookies*
u're berry berry welcome bb ~~!

[awshin]

Hehe, jealous Junsu. I like those cliche falling scene where Yoochun appeared to be a hero to save his beauty. Lol! Off to part 2!

[mubblebizh]

thanks for commenting here also! *handed u Su's meat breads*

[avcheri]

Every paragraph seems to have a mistake here and there. Not too messed up, you got the flow, you need to take time and revise your sentences a little bit better.

Like for example, 'Is he avoiding me or what?' will have less impact than 'Is he avoiding me?'

You can say there's not much difference, but it actually does. The first one will make you sound immature, the second one sounds more in character, since that's how you portray JunSu as one.

[mubblebizh]

thanks for reading and pointed that one :D

i dunno about that, but i intend to make the sentence sounded like "seems like he's avoiding me but maybe not. maybe not."

like that~ but thanks much, me will take more time to revise next time!

ps: could u msg me bout every part u think's so mess up? + concrit if u willing to xD

[chevyportia]

You know, that's a very big favour. It's going to take quite a while to point everything out, and it's going to be long too. Hmm....

[mubblebizh]

okay, no need then :)

[gacktprince2008]

luv how yoochun was there to save junsu. also yunho is starting 2 recognize jaejoong. luv this fic

[ting5]

clumsy Su dunno how to tk of himself and caring Yoochun ne...I sense jealousy Su XD better get to part 2 :)