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msmanuscript

His Fault, 2, First meal.

Aug 24, 2010 18:41

Title: His Fault.
Rating: Mature.
Word Count: 1,482.
Fandom: How I Met Your Mother.
Chapter: 2, First meal.
Summery: "You did this to me. You know you did. And now that you've served your purpose, you will pay for what you have done. Feed me, I'm hungry, and it's YOUR fault I'm hungry."

Part one

( It was kind of hard to explain. )

himym, chara: ted, chara: barney, fic

Comments 8

jamie55 August 25 2010, 04:09:20 UTC

Barney killed someone!
And he killed her well... but why'd he have to kill her... couldn't he just catch a pigeon or something...

I have to say though I did love those first few paragraphs on how they needed each other... <3

idioticonion August 25 2010, 07:22:26 UTC

Yes! I love that Barney killed someone for Ted! Of course he would. Barney definitely has a brutal side. I loved this:

Two nights before, he would have picked her up and fucked her brains out. Many years ago, she could have been his mother.

Sent chills through me.

yogurtpo3 August 25 2010, 11:04:45 UTC

Wha? Barney killed someone? NOOOooo...
And Ted BIT him? T_T

The story is so so dark.. and yet, so so intriguing! Gah...!!

msmanuscript August 25 2010, 23:24:21 UTC

No, Ted didn't bite him. Ted's nails caught him. Ted bit the jug, though.

yogurtpo3 August 25 2010, 23:31:22 UTC

Oh... that's why! Haha... vampires, neck and blood just makes my mind automatically allude to biting! XD

secondmezzanine August 25 2010, 15:30:24 UTC

Totally creepy dark awesome!

splashingfish August 25 2010, 19:47:55 UTC

Ooh, very dark, very creepy. Vampire!Ted just gets better by the paragraph. And Barney determined to help him, even if it means killing, is very nice. More please!