Comments | msliz4857: Controlled Love, Part 28: First

msliz4857

Controlled Love, Part 28: First

Mar 17, 2007 19:15

Title: First
Series: Controlled Love, Part 28. Start the series here.
Fandom: A Bit of Fry & Laurie
Pairing: Tony/Control
Rating: NC-17 W00t! :D
Summary: Their first time. Tony's inner hottieTMderien gives a command performance. Control is quite pleased.
Disclaimer: No ownership claimed, just oodles of love for these characters.

( First )

boffle, myfic

Comments 31

jadedgothchild March 18 2007, 00:14:13 UTC

Oh god that's hot.

Those two... Doing that... There... With the words and the touching...

You're fabulous my darling.

msliz4857 March 18 2007, 02:35:25 UTC

*blushes* Thank you, my love!

Remember... I told you it would happen. I'm glad you trusted and came along for the ride! :D

Yay! for words and touching!

mibdevotee March 18 2007, 00:22:56 UTC

Yes, that was very hot. And beautiful...

msliz4857 March 18 2007, 02:36:07 UTC

Why, thank you! I like that characterizations... I did want it to be more than just hot. :D

zekkass March 18 2007, 00:51:27 UTC

Dear lord that was hot. Hot hot. And touching.

And Tony seems to have the makings of a controlfreak. In both ways. :D

derien March 18 2007, 01:12:11 UTC

Controlfreak! heee!! *giggles in the corner*

zekkass March 18 2007, 01:18:42 UTC

They would make for the innocentest S&M couple ever. And Tony makes for the greatest top. Someday, someone needs to explore that aspect of their relationship in detail. ;)

mibdevotee March 18 2007, 01:21:46 UTC

Controlfreak, youre right! lol

Thread 5

jabber_moose March 18 2007, 01:00:35 UTC

*rereads over and over and over* the last words of the first paragraph sum it up perfectly.

At Last!

So so SO hot, and sweet and THEM.

Excellently written.

*rereads*

msliz4857 March 18 2007, 02:49:58 UTC

ZOMG yay! for multiple re-reads! *hugs*

Thanks, love! I'm so so happy you liked this! I really wanted this to be a thank you to all my wonderful friends like you who've been so supportive of this series over the past weeks.

*rehugs*

derien March 18 2007, 01:11:27 UTC

Whoo!! Tony the Dom - excellant! I didn't, for some reason, even think it, but it's only fair - after all, Stephen gets all the Dom parts in most pairings of their characters. And the careful and polite speach still worked so very well, even in the midst of all this, I was amazed. :)

(One teeny typo, which you may have fixed by the time I mention it - "Control, would like to watch me come… on you?" - I think you need another 'you' after 'would.')

msliz4857 March 18 2007, 02:47:52 UTC

I was a little leery about Dom!Tony, but writing it was very smooth. But then again, that's been my experience with writing this entire series.

Thank you for your lovely words. I'm glad you thought this all worked. It was interesting, to say the least, to write action and dialog for these two in a sex scene! I think they both do have an innocence about them, but on the other hand, they are adults!

And that you so much for spotting the typo! I'd not seen it, in spite of having read this a gazillion times. And I've removed another word from somewhere else, so I kept my word count the same. (One advantage of writing such wordy dialog... there's always a word that can get yanked without any problem!)