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msgenevieve

The Right Road - Chapter Eight

Jan 23, 2010 22:24

Title: The Right Road (8/9)
Fandom: Prison Break
Pairing: Michael Scofield/Sara Tancredi
Characters: Michael Scofield, Sara Tancredi, Lincoln Burrows, Veronica Donovan, Frank Tancredi, various original characters
Rating: This chapter? I'd say R to be on the safe side.
Genre: AU, Non-Epilogue-Compliant, Alternate Reality
Length: 6,723 words
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alternate reality, r, michael/sara, the right road, non-epilogue-compliant

Comments 69

lizparker6 January 23 2010, 14:46:08 UTC

Ok, so ive just finished reading the last chapter and O-M-G Jen ( ... )

msgenevieve January 24 2010, 06:00:14 UTC

Wow, thank you so much. I don't know where to start, lol!

Anyway..what I love most about this fic is the fact that you simply do not rush with it, you describe and express every single gesture, mimic, expression, word, and I love you for that, because this way, one can savour and enjoy the fic - and the chatacters - the more.

Thank you. When I write, I need to be able to 'see' what's happening - for me, it's the only way for me to know whether what I'm making these characters do or say are things they would actually do or so and not just wishful thinking on my own part.

but a couple of days ago, you asked your flist for advice on how to proceed if changing a thing from the canon in your fic, well, it imediately came to my mind - although maybe utterly unjustified and incorrect - when i was reading about michaels brain surgery..did it have to do something with that?Ah, yes, sorry for being vague with that question, but I didn't want to spoil for this chapter. The problem I had was that Crab Simmons (the lowlife from whom Linc ( ... )

danni18 January 23 2010, 16:10:11 UTC

OMG..that was the best first date ever. I loved how you kept so much of the story in cannon..like all the stuff with Linc and the tumor. I giggled when you mentioned him wanting to eat a lot..so detailed. You wrote them so well, their conversation was so intimate. And the kiss...so sexy..and well worth the build up. Awesome chapter!!

msgenevieve January 24 2010, 06:06:41 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad you thought the kiss was worth the building up, because I was a little worried about that, lol! *g*

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msgenevieve January 24 2010, 06:08:20 UTC

Hee, thank you! :)

lafleurdumal_gs January 23 2010, 19:48:45 UTC

I can't tell you how much I love this story. I'm sad to see it's coming to an end.

That last secne with the kiss was just perfect!

msgenevieve January 24 2010, 06:10:35 UTC

Thank you so much. I'm a little sad too, but that means I can go back to that RPF monster of mine, and that makes me happy. :)

torogi January 24 2010, 09:00:16 UTC

*butting in* OMG RPF, yessss pleaase.

tuesdaeschild January 23 2010, 19:49:00 UTC

Dear Lord, I think I might be in need of CPR at any moment!!

Beautiful, Jen. Truly beautiful.

Everything is very ordinary, a litany of tasks she does every single day, almost without thinking, but she feels as though she’s doing each and every one for the first time.

My diagnosis? She's in love. I'm sure the other patient will feel exactly the same when he's brushing his teeth and putting on his jammies!! My prognosis is that sooner or later they will need to get a room...

The canon is as cleverly interwoven here as in the last chapter; even down to the hypothalamic hamartoma...so much better than how it was handled in that season that dare not speak it's name!! So much more realistic, for a start!

“He told me I was behaving like a spoiled, immature brat, and maybe I was just disappointed because knowing the truth meant I couldn’t make myself feel better by comparing my life to his anymore.”

Wise Lincoln! He was right!

“Oh, he punched me back,” he says casually, “and it was at that moment I remembered something important that ( ... )

msgenevieve January 24 2010, 06:17:55 UTC

Awww, Foxy, you're too kind! *blushes*

even down to the hypothalamic hamartoma...so much better than how it was handled in that season that dare not speak it's name!! So much more realistic, for a start!

LOL. Do you think maybe it's because I took a few minutes to actually research the condition, unlike MO and NS?

I tried very hard to keep Michael and Lincoln's relationship on the right track, despite this being AU, and if you approve, then hot damn, that's good enough for me! *dances*

Thanks so much, and yes, I'm doing okay. *hugs you back*

tuesdaeschild January 24 2010, 15:58:05 UTC

Excuse me?!! You're the one who's too kind treating us to such a delicious CANON story that drew on the AU-ness of that season!! ;)

Do you think maybe it's because I took a few minutes to actually research the condition, unlike MO and NS?

Oddly enough, yes I do! The whole tumour thing worked far better in your hands!! The inclusion of so many details from PB AU canon made this a far better alternative and all it took was for Lincoln to go and confess to his brother what he'd done instead of going to that garage to change the whole premise! It helped that both Michael and Sara were invited to the wedding too, of course, but fate sometimes conspires to bring soul mates together somehow, don't you think ( ... )