Scattered - Hiatus Fic Challenge

[msgenevieve]

Title: Scattered (1/1)
Characters: Michael, Sara, Lincoln, LJ
Pairing: Michael/Sara, mention of Lincoln/Jane
Genre: Het, AU
Length: 2,497 words
Rating: PG-15 (a few bad words)
Summary:Home is a feeling, not a place.
Author's Note:Written for the There's No Place Like Home challenge at pbhiatus_fic. It's incredibly late, but what's one more overdue fic, hey

Comments

[sierra_foxx]

Oh Jen, this is beautiful - I love how you've split this into three little scenes, each one tugging on my heartstrings harder and harder with every word I read. *sniffs*

LJ shifts restlessly in his chair, knowing all the times in his life he’s wanted to be treated as an adult have just come back to bite him in the ass.

Such a telling observation here - and perfectly in character for LJ, IMO. It's quite amazing he isn't curled up in a fetal position somewhere, when you think about what he's been through. *hugs him*

“If by some twist of fate he’s still alive, I don’t believe any of us have anything to fear from him.”

Yay! Kellerman's possible survival FTW!

This is wonderful stuff, darling, and I loved every word. *g*

[msgenevieve]

*blushes*

Thank you!

Such a telling observation here - and perfectly in character for LJ, IMO. It's quite amazing he isn't curled up in a fetal position somewhere, when you think about what he's been through. *hugs him*

I just love LJ. It's easy to forget the character is only sixteen sometimes, given how much he's grown up over the three seasons. I really want to see him and his dad surfing together. *pines*

I would dearly love Kellerman to have been liberated from the back of that van. We'll see, I guess.

[scribblecat]

Squee! I love how Linc is terrified of Jane. Also when Michael is talking about how he regrets not having Linc over more often. The dialogue had great rhythm and you'd never know they weren't always close brothers (well, unless you are paying attention to what they are talking about but you know what I mean). You are great with their interactions.
I like the Sara apartment stuff, in and out. Does. Not. Want. Michael doing his best to help. Yes, Frank Tancredi would have loved the tattooed convict hanging around his daughter. I guess those two men have one thing in common besides Sara though, they believe anything worth doing is worth doing right.
This left me with a hopeful feeling. Got to love fic like this, when there are dark themes but still light to balance.
*hugs for LJ*

[msgenevieve]

Hey, guess what?

ZOMG IT'S MAY!!!!!!!1111

Ahem.

I'm glad you finally got to read this *and* that you liked it, lol!

All these folks have the most intriguingly complicated relationships and messed-up lives, but when you get right down to it, they all care about each other very much and are determined to move forward in the right direction. *squishes them*

[jolietjones]

Three interesting scenes.

Great for LJ to feel such exitement and anticipation for the future after all he's been through, and to know his mother would approve of his decision.

The apartment scene made me feel very uncomfortable - I couldn't wait for them to get out of there and I loved the conversation between Michael and Lincoln. They never talk enough on screen, do they?

the tall blonde woman who both terrifies and fascinates him to the point of distraction

Yeah baby!

[msgenevieve]

Thanks!

The more I think about it, the more I think this story needed more (of what, I'm not sure) so I'm glad you liked it.

They never talk enough on screen, do they?

No, they don't, but then again, you can say a lot with a few words. We don't need great big speeches between them, just proof of the emotional connection we know is there.

[wrldpossibility]

*claps!*

I really liked Sara bringing up that Kman had been right there, in her apartment. It made me wonder how much Michael actually knows about all that. If I remember correctly (which isn't very likely) they never directly discussed the extent that Kman infiltrated Sara's life in canon. I wonder if it would have been news to Michael that Kman had made Sara dinner and sat in her living room. Of course, I picture this fic set in AU-land, so in my mind I imagine they have discussed it. Either way, interesting to think about.

Oh, and in Sara's apartment, did the guys who came to kill her clean it all back up, so it didn't look like there had been a struggle? Or did they leave it trashed, like in this fic? I thought I remembered they wanted to make it look like a suicide? Now I'm just pondering...ignore me. I really liked this, and (obviously) it brought back a lot of questions I'd had in S2.

[msgenevieve]

It made me wonder how much Michael actually knows about all that. If I remember correctly (which isn't very likely) they never directly discussed the extent that Kman infiltrated Sara's life in canon. I wonder if it would have been news to Michael that Kman had made Sara dinner and sat in her living room. Of course, I picture this fic set in AU-land, so in my mind I imagine they have discussed it.

In my head here, they've definitely discussed it. This wasn't a case of Sara finally telling him what had happened, but talking out loud as she tries to make sense of it all, but I suspect you don't need me to tell you that, lol!

Oh, and in Sara's apartment, did the guys who came to kill her clean it all back up, so it didn't look like there had been a struggle?

Kellerman told a minion to clean it up, but I didn't want to do that, so I didn't. Of course, having said that, her coming into a totally clean apartment would have been equally creepy, as though she may have imagined it all.

[wrldpossibility]

Ohhhh. That would have been totally creepy! I didn't think of it like that. I would have definitely wondered if I'd imagined it!

[msgenevieve]

*is a nasty author*

[chapter_stork]

Warning: I am about to take this story somewhere I'm sure you never intended.

Interesting that Sara's near-panic attack focuses on Kellerman, and she seems equally as upset by the betrayal as she does by the fact that he tried to kill her. I have an inkling that part of Sara has some unresolved anger towards Michael; she forgave him, yes, but falling for Kellerman's masquerade had to hurt twice as bad when she was still reeling from Michael's betrayal at Fox River. I think Michael senses this too, which is why he drops the suitcases in his haste to tell her "Sara, don't do this." And her response? "What do you suggest I do? Pretend none of it ever happened?" (my emphasis, of course

[msgenevieve]

I have an inkling that part of Sara has some unresolved anger towards Michael; she forgave him, yes, but falling for Kellerman's masquerade had to hurt twice as bad when she was still reeling from Michael's betrayal at Fox River. I think Michael senses this too, which is why he drops the suitcases in his haste to tell her "Sara, don't do this." And her response? "What do you suggest I do? Pretend none of it ever happened?" (my emphasis, of course.)

You're a very clever woman, do you know that? I didn't come out and write it in plain English, but that vibe was certainly in my thoughts when I was working on this.

Just goes to show there's still lots of Michael/Sara ground to cover.

Damn straight. *g*