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mrstater

Heroes Fic: Paternal Instinct

Oct 11, 2008 11:04

Title: Paternal Instinct
Author: MrsTater
Characters: Sylar, Noah, Unidentified Female Character
Rating & Warnings: PG-13 for mild sexuality
Format & Word Count: one-shot, 1892 words
Summary: Gabriel knows now that the power to give life to another is far more special than the power to take life for himself.
Author's Note: Episode 3.4, "I Am ( Read more... )

character: gabriel gray (sylar), character: elle bishop, pairing: sylar/elle, character: noah gray

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mrstater October 11 2008, 22:31:25 UTC

Aw, thanks so much! I enjoyed writing this a lot, and am happy that there are other daddy!Sylar fans to share with. I knew after I watched it I couldn't be the only girl who squeed about the adorkable stay-at-home dad in a "Hail to the Chef" apron making waffles for his little boy. :)

ilovetbag24 October 11 2008, 21:59:44 UTC

Ooooh, this was really good! I enjoyed it! It just flutters my heart to see Sylar being all fatherly and loving on his son! It's so cute! Well done!

mrstater October 11 2008, 22:32:25 UTC

I'm totally with you on the heart-fluttering. Daddies make me melt, lol. Very glad you liked my depiction of daddy!Sylar. Thanks for reading and commenting!

fifmeister October 12 2008, 05:29:01 UTC

Ohhh. *flappy hands* This is just what I needed after watching 3x04! I loved seeing daddy!Gabriel in that episode, the glimpse of the normality of his life, and this fic is a perfect extension of that. I especially liked how you worked in Noah's mother. Initially, I was a little skeptical of the idea of a fic featuring an unidentified character, but I think you did a great job of executing it. I loved how you blended their intimacy with the hints of angst and past scars, that even though their relationship isn't perfect, Gabriel's love for her and for their child--and his desire to put Sylar behind him--is obvious. I also loved the mention of Virginia, and how Gabriel understands her better now that he's a parent himself. And the last line of the fic is perfect!

Anyway, all that to say that I really enjoyed it immensely, and I'm especially impressed given that this is your first Heroes fic. I hope it isn't your last!

mrstater October 12 2008, 14:38:48 UTC

Oh, I love your icon! That was such an adorable little moment; Gabriel's reaction of looking for a moment like, 'That wasn't exactly what I meant,' but being tickled by his kid was just the cutest ever. *giggles ( ... )

alliesings October 12 2008, 16:29:21 UTC

It's days like this that I wonder how I have no Heroes icons at all!

I'm so glad you wrote this!

I love the way he justifies the uses of his powers--and the way you contrast that with his wife's scar, the reminder of what he can become at any moment.

I could hear his voice when talking to his son, then listening to that same voice when talking to his wife made me realize what amazing potential that voice has. The last three lines were great!

Even though you don't name the wife, I like her personality. It would take one amazing woman to do what she's done with him, and you manage to make me feel for these three characters every bit as much as for the Lupin family.

mrstater October 12 2008, 18:40:40 UTC

It's days like this that I wonder how I have no Heroes icons at all!

Hee -- I spent far too much time yesterday hunting for Sylar icons. How did I go two whole seasons without noticing how hot he is??

Thank you so much for reading this and taking the time to leave such lovely comments! I really had an unexpectedly fun time probing into Gabriel's mind at this point in his life, walking a fine line between using his powers in a good way, and being tempted to slip back into his old ways. I'm so happy you feel I captured his voice! It's nerve-wracking attempting a new fandom and a new character for the first time. Glad you like the wife, too! I'm so eager to learn who it is and how they got to that point! I just hope it's not a tragic story!

mollykami October 13 2008, 00:57:41 UTC

You had me hooked with the first sentence! You must write some more of these... this is really fantastic. Perfect and you captured Sylar's voice, methinks. You described me quite accurately too. 0:D But in all seriousness, you used a character with no name in an awesome manner. I imagine it was difficult to incorporate an unidentified mama.

A great read! And I'll take my Sylar waffles with Gabriel on the side ;)

mrstater October 13 2008, 01:30:20 UTC

LOL - Awesome icon. Fake!Cop!Sylar rocks. :)

Thank you so much for reading my fic, and especially for taking the time to say such nice things about it. I had so much fun with this, even though I'd never thought about writing Heroes fic before, that I'd really like to do it again. So the vote of confidence is much appreciated. :) I'm so pleased you think I captured his voice, and pulled off the nameless baby mama (who is me, clearly ;)) - I have my personal preference for who it is that I was modeling her around, but it was really tricky not having a name to refer to; I was afraid "his wife" and "Noah's mom" read awkwardly, lol.

Enjoy your waffles and side order of Gabriel. Thanks again. :D

mollykami October 13 2008, 01:45:37 UTC

Fake!Cop!Sylar does rock. Lol when he pulled that accent out I went all fan-girl again.

I still have no clue who the baby mama is. And I can't decide if I want the show to ID her or not... imagination v. TV-facts. Toughie.

mrstater October 13 2008, 01:48:36 UTC

Oh, I know, the NY accent was hysterical. Gotta love a well-dressed man being authoritative. ;)

I can't decide if I want the show to ID her or not... imagination v. TV-facts. Toughie.

I know, it's a risk, isn't it? What if it's not someone good? Or what if it's a relationship that didn't work out? I want some happiness in that future, dangit!

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