This was great, as always. You're always good at keeping everyone IC, but I thought Sirius was dead on. Loved it. And I always liked to think that Remus came up with the waddiwasi spell by himself too.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your comments about Sirius, especially, because he is not an easy character for me to write with his manic personality. I'm trying, though!
There will be some more backstory to Remus and Waddiwasi in the next TH revision, so stay tuned. ;) I'm very glad you liked that tidbit!
At the risk of Tonks hexing me, I'll take the smouldering look. This was brilliant, and hilarious, which is exactly what I needed this evening. I was rooting for Tonks to send the gum up Snape's nose, but that honour truly belongs to the master. Well done!
Thank you! I'm very glad to hear that this fic hit the right note for you last night. It was fun to write, and it's fun for me to know there was a bit of misdirection about who was actually going to get the better of Snape in the end. I couldn't take it from Remus; he's too sexy in POA showing off that "useful little spell." What woman wouldn't want a man with that skill? lol
I really like what you've done with Tonks in this version -- from "I don't need a knight in shining armour, you sexist git," Tonks hissed at Sirius, to "You, though," she said, "I expect you to give me all the smouldering looks you want, all right?" The completely competent Auror, and the sweetly romantic flirt.
I like McGonagall a lot here, too -- she really does seem like she'd be the type to secretly enjoy the Marauders. And Sirius's mood swings are painted in very vivid colors.
Thanks very much, especially for your words about Tonks! I felt she, almost more than anyone, was a bit meek in the original. I think that was due to I was very interested in how speechless Snape rendered her in HBP; but Tonks is typically not a person knocked for six by little things, so one of the goals in this revision was to make her a little saucier -- and part of that, so Remus could be more smitten, hehe.
Glad you liked Minerva's cameo, too. I would love to know more about her past; I think underneath that austere bun must have been a bit of a hellion herself. ;)
Anyway, as always, muchos gracias for reading and for your comments!
When you told me you were going to work in one of my favourite stories into this story, I was quite eager to see how. And boy, was it worth it! I loved it! Working in "The Devil on your Shoulder" was sheer genius!
"Is that your way of saying, you, me, your office, tartan dressing gowns?"
Hysterical! I'm just as disappointed as Remus to not see Minerva's reaction to that.
Remus is at his classic best here - his quiet tones calculated to rile Severus up, when he apologizes for waddiwasi is a lovely way to incorporate that.
I love the atmosphere you set here in this story - as it was with the original. But somehow the chemistry between Remus and Tonks seems more breathtaking in this revision.
Snape is true to character as we discussed earlier - gittish and just plain mean! You write his character to a T, something which I felt JKR failed to achieve in the final book. ;)
This revision, more than any of them so far, has been the most absolutely surprising one to me in regard to what I kept. Because I kept quite a lot, but the mood of it completely changed on me. When I originally wrote this fic, it all sprang out of the "Moony! I'd say you've mastered the art of the smouldering gaze." with Sirius being very matchmakery. But once I tweaked the other dialogue to Snape being more vicious and hostile, and Sirius coming back at him more edgily, I thought he wouldn't slip from caustic to cheerful quite that way. Which in turn made it seem reasonable for him to almost goad Remus into action. I'm glad you felt that worked, because I wasn't sure what it said about Remus' maturity, in particular!
I'm very glad you think the chemistry feels more palpable, even though there's really not any physical connection between them in this fic.
Thanks so much for your lovely words, dear. I'm always pleased to hear from you, especially as you seem to know the original versions well!
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There will be some more backstory to Remus and Waddiwasi in the next TH revision, so stay tuned. ;) I'm very glad you liked that tidbit!
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I like McGonagall a lot here, too -- she really does seem like she'd be the type to secretly enjoy the Marauders. And Sirius's mood swings are painted in very vivid colors.
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Glad you liked Minerva's cameo, too. I would love to know more about her past; I think underneath that austere bun must have been a bit of a hellion herself. ;)
Anyway, as always, muchos gracias for reading and for your comments!
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"Is that your way of saying, you, me, your office, tartan dressing gowns?"
Hysterical! I'm just as disappointed as Remus to not see Minerva's reaction to that.
Remus is at his classic best here - his quiet tones calculated to rile Severus up, when he apologizes for waddiwasi is a lovely way to incorporate that.
I love the atmosphere you set here in this story - as it was with the original. But somehow the chemistry between Remus and Tonks seems more breathtaking in this revision.
Snape is true to character as we discussed earlier - gittish and just plain mean! You write his character to a T, something which I felt JKR failed to achieve in the final book. ;)
Lovely work, love. As always, of course.
Can't wait for your next.
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I'm very glad you think the chemistry feels more palpable, even though there's really not any physical connection between them in this fic.
Thanks so much for your lovely words, dear. I'm always pleased to hear from you, especially as you seem to know the original versions well!
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Know the versions well? Almost by heart I would say ;)
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*dies*
(Being dead, I can't do much talking so I'll keep my review short: Brilliant as usual!) =)
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