Transfigured Hearts #3: Taking Umbrage (2/3)

Apr 17, 2007 08:29

Title: Taking Umbrage (2/3)
Author: MrsTater
Rating: PG
Word Count: 4100ish
Summary: Time is a precious commodity for members of the Order of the Phoenix, especially where romance is concerned. Why, then, would Remus want to waste one of those rare opportunities to be with Tonks talking about the Ministry's unjust new Educational Decree that places ( Read more... )

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cae_prince April 17 2007, 17:50:03 UTC
This was amazing!

First Sirius : Even if he is not one of my most liked characters, I love that you've brought out his virtues here - his steadfast loyalty to Remus could rival even Tonks' devotion to Remus. You Remus-Sirius (Note the absence of the slash in between, before you think I've gone bonkers) dynamic is just the way it is in the books.

"The last thing Harry needs," replied Remus mildly, "is to be poisoned to her before he sets foot in her classroom."

"Your classroom!" Sirius fired back. "As if the toad won't poison Harry to her without my help!"
This line in particular shows that loyalty far more than the rest ( ... )

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mrstater April 18 2007, 03:19:26 UTC
I think I keep saying this, but it's so nice to know you're interested in re-reading the series with the changes, and that you're familiar enough to see where they occur. And I'm glad you think they improve it, or else this would be a bit of a worthless endeavor, LOL! Anyway, thanks not only for reading, but taking the time to comment, too. You always say such thoughtful things ( ... )

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etf004 April 18 2007, 18:26:54 UTC
This is great, I really loved it! Albeit I did rush through it quite quickly because I have loads of art to do, but when I have more time (like after tomorrow) I will definitely go through and read it again to really appreciate how good it actually is! I've got to say I love the way you write Remus and Tonks, and I think the way you make them interact is priceless! :)

This is fabulous!

Emma xxxxx

P.S. I know this is random, but would you mind if I friended you?

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mrstater April 18 2007, 19:01:58 UTC
Why thank you very much! I'm so pleased you liked your first read-through and are interested enough to come back to it. I hope to get the third revised chapter up in the next day or two.

And I love new friends. I think I've seen you around ladybracknell's journal?

What sort of art do you do?

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etf004 April 18 2007, 19:12:48 UTC
I think I've seen you around ladybracknell's journal?

Yep, that's me lol!

What sort of art do you do?

It's just easter holiday homework for my GCSEs - nothing fancy really! I'm just cutting and sticking loads of piccies in my sketch book of landscapes I've seen over the holiday, then drawing 4 of them, and then researching an artist who has used landscapes like mine. It's nothing special, but I've got to keep working at it to maintain my grades, lol.

Emma xxxxx

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mrstater April 18 2007, 19:34:37 UTC
Sounds cool! Have you ever done fan art? Especially of the R/T variety. ;)

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shimotsuki April 18 2007, 21:37:12 UTC
Wonderful, wonderful stuff. I read about half of TH in one giant guilty gulp (guilty because I was supposed to be writing Christmas cards and thank-yous) right before the rt_challenge started in January, before I was familiar with your work. I've been wanting to go back and read it again more slowly, so your reposting/revisions are coming along at a perfect time for me. ;) And the revisions are wonderful -- the characterization is so believable, and the conflict that Remus is trying to negotiate between wanting to be with Tonks and feeling irresponsible about giving into that is the perfect setup for his coming retreat into 'too old/poor/dangerous'. (These remarks are meant to apply to everything from "Caught" to here, because I've been remiss about leaving comments ( ... )

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mrstater April 19 2007, 01:46:39 UTC
Thank you very much! It's lovely to know you liked the original versions enough to re-read, and I'm so pleased to know you like the revised versions! I just feel like my own view of the characters and the storyline has changed so much since I first starting writing it, and my writing grew, too, so I wanted to make it all match up better. Though of course there is the fear that the revisions don't improve, and that no one but me cares, lol. So I'm very glad you're enjoying these reposts ( ... )

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shimotsuki April 19 2007, 14:56:37 UTC
part of me wonders why I jumped into the issue of marriage so early in! So I've been trying to make it convincing that it would come up by accident

That's interesting, because I thought it was completely convincing. At least, it seemed perfectly natural that each of them would have thought about it already. Remus, because he's been lonely for a long time and it's a sure bet he's given a lot of thought to his (perceived) lack of future prospects for a family, even before knowing Tonks. And Tonks, because she's liked Remus for a while now and when you think you've found someone wonderful it's natural to dream, even just a little, about a future together.

I guess it is potentially unusual for the subject to actually come up in conversation this early in the relationship, but I'd say the way you led up to that (Remus being pushed to a sort of breaking point) was completely plausible as well.

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mrstater April 19 2007, 18:08:33 UTC
Well that's the rationale I hoped came across, and my original reasoning for doing it was that I wanted the hospital scene to have been set up from very early on...but I still wasn't sure how totally plausible it was! You've relieved me greatly! :)

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anywhere_but_nj August 1 2007, 13:49:54 UTC
"Don't hit me because I expected you to come in pink and perky, like Remus said you were this morning, for him."

I find it hilarious that Sirius bugged Remus for all of the details. He's so weird, that one. It's his COUSIN and his BEST FRIEND.
and he shouldn't have said he had Galleons riding on it. Of course Tonks will make him lose after that. hahahaha

Obviously you haven't been listening to our Marauder stories, or you'd know it was Prongs that fancied redheads, not Moony."

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. No, Moony obviously likes the multi-colored one.

So, instead of Tonks brown or Black black, I went Weasley red to annoy her."

Good. For. Her. Yeah, just like Sirius. *does a dance* And Umbridge can't yell about it!

"I've got to find out whether Harry's people-annoying skills have got rusty over the summer. He'll needs them sharp if he's got to put up with Snivellus and Umbridge, as well." *laughs evilly* That's so great. So wrong, but so great ( ... )

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mrstater August 2 2007, 13:00:24 UTC
Hee. Sirius strikes me as the type who would be far too involved in other people's love lives, especially when he has no way to have one for himself...Poor guy.

I really enjoyed writing this quarrel between the three of them, and then finally between Remus and Tonks. They don't particularly play fair all the time, and your right about his comment not being a good way to end it. It's hard not to feel badly for him, is it? Because it's just not fair and he's such a good man. I'm glad you do feel like that, because I wanted sympathy for him even though he's being a total prat. Remus is at once ridiculous and completely in the right to feel the way he does, and I think that's one thing that drew me to this pairing.

Thank you very much for all your comments!

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Love it! anonymous August 10 2007, 13:28:14 UTC
So far, I lvoe it! It's really good! My favourite so far was the first one of the series, but they all are good so far!

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Re: Love it! mrstater August 10 2007, 14:28:20 UTC
Thanks very much! I'm glad to know you're enjoying the series and appreciate you taking the time to tell me. :)

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