is wonderful - I thought first of the raising of a child, and how can someone be raised two whole times when once is enough for a lifetime, but even then it's incomplete, insufficient, not all the way? So a process, incomplete, fits perfectly all the "-ing" verbs in that first part, which give this great sense of suspended motion.
Half buried, half born, half hoping that there would be no more,
great great repetition and transition and sounds!
an arsenal wrapped in tissue-thin membranes of love too delicate to acknowledge.
i really like this image a lot!
Thank you for posting this! I'm glad you decided to even though this comm looks so dead :)
Thank you so much for you comment and lovely words : )
I kinda got caught up with the idea of 'raised' and like you said, how Dean's upbringing and his ascent from Hell were incomplete, but also the play on 'razed' and in a sense how fire and burning simultaneously destroys his life and propels him on...somehow it came out as this though : )
I'm never sure about repetition. I really like it but I think sometimes it can be annoying, so I'm glad you like d that. Also the fleshy metaphor : )
I'm new to this so it's lovely to get some feedback. Thank you x
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He was raised twice.
But not all the way.
is wonderful - I thought first of the raising of a child, and how can someone be raised two whole times when once is enough for a lifetime, but even then it's incomplete, insufficient, not all the way? So a process, incomplete, fits perfectly all the "-ing" verbs in that first part, which give this great sense of suspended motion.
Half buried,
half born, half hoping that there would be no more,
great great repetition and transition and sounds!
an arsenal
wrapped in tissue-thin membranes of love too delicate to acknowledge.
i really like this image a lot!
Thank you for posting this! I'm glad you decided to even though this comm looks so dead :)
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I kinda got caught up with the idea of 'raised' and like you said, how Dean's upbringing and his ascent from Hell were incomplete, but also the play on 'razed' and in a sense how fire and burning simultaneously destroys his life and propels him on...somehow it came out as this though : )
I'm never sure about repetition. I really like it but I think sometimes it can be annoying, so I'm glad you like d that. Also the fleshy metaphor : )
I'm new to this so it's lovely to get some feedback. Thank you x
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