Comments | morgandawn: My Fic: Long Distance Call (SPN, Gen)

morgandawn

My Fic: Long Distance Call (SPN, Gen)

Jul 04, 2007 20:10

Three years after Mary dies, John rents a small apartment in a multiplex. Sam is not old enough for John to stay away overnight but John makes liberal use of his landlady’s kind heart and offers of babysitting to fit in as much research and learning as he can between day jobs. When their Dad stays out late they both sleep on the landlady's couch, ( Read more... )

myfic, spn

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solo July 5 2007, 13:04:38 UTC

Oh, nice and creepy! And the solution is so in character for Dean.

morgandawn July 5 2007, 15:20:08 UTC

thank you. the writing style is not one I've never used before and I am glad the creepy came through.

tsuki_no_bara July 5 2007, 20:44:30 UTC

this is kind of creepy - more so because considering the world they grew up in, it's entirely possible that mary really was on the phone - and really sad. i can totally picture wee!dean freaking out because he doesn't want sammy to leave him, and wee!sammy innocently chatting away on the phone.

morgandawn July 5 2007, 21:32:15 UTC

The best Twilight Zone eps are the ones that leave you thinking they could actually happen. So I am glad I captured that feeling here as well.

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morgandawn July 5 2007, 21:33:04 UTC

Thanks. I was trying a new (to me) narrative style and I am happy it flowed.

embroiderama July 5 2007, 22:10:15 UTC

THis is so damn creepy. I love it!

morgandawn July 5 2007, 22:13:00 UTC

thank you. this is why you shouldn't let little kids watch Twilight Zone reruns - because they write creepy stories decades later. :-)

relativity1953 July 5 2007, 23:52:28 UTC

I think I remember that episode - very eerie!

I know that Dean has a guilty conscious about, well, just about everything... but why does he feel that his mother won't talk to him and that John would take Sam and join her, leaving Dean behind? It's perfectly in-character, but I would love to hear why you think Dean feels this way.

open question to all readers morgandawn July 5 2007, 23:59:35 UTC

actually I'd like to turn the question around and see what you - the reader - read (or don't read) into this. I have a few ideas, but I'd like to let the reader's form their own impressions first.

Re: open question to all readers relativity1953 July 6 2007, 00:10:07 UTC

That's actually what I was doing - I have thoughts/feelings about what goes on in Dean's head, but I like to hear what others think. I am a total Dean-girl and often worry that I may read too much into things on the show.

But, I think the idea of Dean fearing total abandonment by his family is right on the money. However, I never thought of it happening at 7. I thought the idea may have formed somewhat in his head early on with Mary's death and John's subsequent depression. But, I figured that Sam's leaving wouldn't be thought of until his little brother got to the fun 'I hate you' pre-teens and rebelious teen years.

Re: open question to all readers morgandawn July 6 2007, 01:22:25 UTC

well let's try it this way: do you think Dean believed that it was his mother at the other end of the phone? because if so, then some of what I outlined might follow if you put yourself the mindset of a 7 year old who had lost his mother at a young age.....particularly one who had been exposed to too many Twilight Zone reruns where children are whisked away by dead relatives.