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[moredamnlies]

Title: Wasting away.
Fandom: Hetalia.
Genre: Angst/failed Romance.
Pairing(s): Alfred, Arthur. Appearances from India, Hungary, Germany.
Rating/Warnings: 12-ish, anti-climactic.
Wordcount: 3838.
Summary: A sad and overly long word-doodle.

Comments

[allyoucaneater]

fffffffffffffff damn, aside from the need to give Alfred a slap or two (before sending him to a shrink), this fic deserves a sequel *A* I just... wow, I love it! So sad and quiet..? I don't know but it feels that way... I like how it ended in a hopeful tone though, along with the open ending (but still, sequeeeel).

[moredamnlies]

Oh Hell yes does Alfred need a shrink! Actually, the bit of this that I went 'awwwwww' when I was writing it was Germany admitting he'd seen a shrink. I just adore writing sad!Ludwig.

Sequel will happen. When I've finished writing the other sequels I'm meant to be writing and extending one of my kink meme fills that I want to turn into a proper story.

And on another note mate, I've just been looking at your deviantart account.... I am struck down in admiration at your art skills. Wow!

[allyoucaneater]

Sad and honest Ludwig is wonderful, I admit. I love how you wrote him in the fic: understanding and empathetic. It made America less of a... reader's scorn victim and more of a misunderstood, confused character, more or less.

Oh yay, sequel~ Take your time :D

FFFFFFFFF Thanks! I wanted to get better at drawing though and I've always needed to hear that more from people. You made me very happy >w

[aria_dc_al_fine]

Anti-climatic...somewhat. But a story doesn't always have to have a happy ending. There is a climax - when it's revealed that Alfred just punched Arthur on the face in the conference room. I like that since the beginning, the root of the problem is fuzzy, has been hinted; the bruises have been described, of course, but Arthur's lack of choice - and apparently Alfred's lack of consciousness, as well - is only spelled out clearly in the 'climax'. It's a different take from some other stories - the violent party usually knows, is sorry but cant help repeating the act, rather than being unconscious about it. Well, considering Alfred has the mentality of an overgrown teenager, it's entirely possible

[moredamnlies]

I'm really happy at such an insightful, in-depth review. Thank-you

[aria_dc_al_fine]

I'm very happy to read stories with characterisations that are well thought off...characterisation is a weakness of mine; when I write, I tend to be overexcited with the plot and certain ways I want to see the characters as. To be honest, I have not studied America's character to such a depth, but the things you explain make lots of sense...people can block out things that are not consistent with their self-concept or are damaging to their self-concept.

"wrong for each other," that's quite a strong phrase to use...I stand by whatever I had written, I so badly want a sequel not for the desire to read a happy ending but to see the loose ends tied. Take all the time you need, I'll be patient :)

[sephydark]

Wow, Alfred really has some problems in here. I sincerely hope that he is able to get them worked out. And I hope that Arthur will be able to get over it quickly, at least to the point where he is willing to speak again.

And who knows? Maybe someday they will get to the point where they can have a healthy relationship with each other, even if they haven't reached it yet. That is my hope, at least.

[moredamnlies]

I'd like to be able to write Arthur and Alfred getting to the stage where they become friends once more. I suppose when you have as much time as the nations do, anything can happen.

I hope you didn't find Alfred too bad. I like him as a character and always try to keep him from being totally horrible. He is always a redeemable character because I never want to write him as truly malicious.