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laure_leaf September 2 2007, 01:39:59 UTC
Yay, an update! I liked the way this chapter moved...the steady build-up of tension, and frustration, for them both was perfect....and the abrupt ending has me cursing for more! Really enjoyed it, as per usual.

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kilerkki September 2 2007, 02:12:07 UTC
Oh, we're glad you liked it! We've been looking forward to writing this chapter for months--we finally got the payoff from chapters of tension, and then we get to make things worse! (We're really looking forward to writing the next chapter, too.)

Thank you for your comments!

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shadowsinfire September 2 2007, 04:39:56 UTC
Ah, poor Hayate! He's so... awkward. But completely squiahable.

I want to see Yuugao hit Yonda. The asshole.

Hoping for more soon ^____^

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kilerkki September 2 2007, 05:47:35 UTC
Yuugao did hit Yonda! ...But it wasn't good enough for her, either. XD

Glad you enjoyed!

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shadowsinfire September 3 2007, 06:52:01 UTC
I want her to hit him harder. Maybe knock him out for a week or two. It wouldn't help, but it'd make me feel a lot better XDD

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toboe_lonewolf September 2 2007, 23:56:48 UTC
*about dies of snickers, gasps, and giggles* Oh snap. Oh, double, triple, quadruple snap.

...Crud. I really hope they're not going to hate themselves after this. Although with Yuugao's quest for perfection and Hayate's (kind of) insistence on protocol, I can see how they could. Egads. They'll probably already think of a list after five minutes. And it also probably won't be coherent either.

Yuugao: ...I....dropped the sword...on the ground which is slightly damp and-
Hayate: ...DANGNABBIT SELF DO NOT TOUCH

Hm. Every fanfic I've read with Yuugao thus far (that are painfully few) have her as a kenjutsu user like Hayate or taijutsu. I kind of wonder why.

I really wonder what'll happen next. Gossip grapevine? The entrance of Izumo/Kotetsu/rest of Squad Six? Or maybe even Daisuke, which...would not bode well. It's eithier going to be an implosion or an explosion for Yuugao and Hayate. Poor them, although it gives us readers amusement. Hopefully lots of writer's amusement too. =D

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kilerkki September 3 2007, 14:23:06 UTC
You know us well. A romance is no fun without the conflict (meaning angst!). I laughed pretty hard at your dialogue, though.

There's actually a reason why I write Yuugao as a taijutsu user, although it's pretty pathetic. I'm already writing another intensive genjutsu user (Kurenai) quite heavily, so I didn't want to go there. I have enough experience with martial arts that I can fudge my way through fight scenes pretty well. However, I am absolutely horrible at coming up with cool ninjutsu and ninjutsu names. Thus Yuugao's lightning jutsu are likely to be the only original techniques you'll ever see her use. :D ( ... )

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toboe_lonewolf September 5 2007, 18:06:19 UTC
I think it's actually because I am a sap and like poking fun at everything. Also probably having read far too many romance fanfiction, which is not sane for anything. Which is also why although I'd love making guesses as to what will happen, the ways of romance make it far much more fun to leave it to the authors. *bows*

XP Your choice is as good as anything; I find it surprising that a minor character would have such general...consistency, if you will. There's scores of different theories/ideas as to why Hayate coughs; but Yuugao's fighting style is rather consistent throughout fanfictions. XP I like to think it's because of Revanche, to tell the truth.

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sasukelove2 September 3 2007, 04:56:19 UTC
Wow...that was such a great great chapter!

I loved how everything just seemed to be slowly, but steadily building up to that amazing kiss. I wonder though how they're going to deal with everything now that it happened...

It's going to be sooo awkward :D

Wonderful writing as usual and I can't wait until you update next! Take care.

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kilerkki September 3 2007, 14:25:57 UTC
"Awkward" is a very good descriptor of how it's going to be. We're having fun with it. :D (We also had a lot of fun writing the build-up and the kiss, so we're very glad that you enjoyed it!)

Thanks for your comments~

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alesca_munroe September 4 2007, 04:04:08 UTC
*fangirls* This is more awesome and win than the Kotetsu and Izumo chapter, and that chapter was FULL of both. Kyaaaaaaaaaaa, I'm getting incoherent here! XD Muchos muchos love, can't wait for the aftermath of this one!

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