Short fanfic: "Bewitched and Ensnared"

[mooncove]

Title: "Bewitched and Ensnared" by Susan (mooncove)
Pairings: Snape/Lily, Barbossa/Calypso
Fandom: “Harry Potter” meets “Pirates of the Caribbean”
Genre: het/gen, crossover
Spoilers/prerequisites: Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows and Pirates of the Caribbean 3: At World's End
Rating: PG(-13?) for sexually suggestive situations (no worse than

Comments

[robes_of_earth]

Holy Moley- Snape on a pirate ship! I am amused and aroused all at once!

Over all I liked it very much (and would like to know what happens next!) but there are a few small suggestions I would make to spruce it up a bit. I'll happily beta it for you if you'll kindly explain your preferred method (i.e. how far you want to go). :)

[mooncove]

Amused and aroused and want to know what happens next? I'll take that, thanks! :-)

Hmm, I haven't done much fanfic ... name me some methods and I'll tell you which one I prefer! Thankyouthankyouthankyou.

[robes_of_earth]

Well bascially I could just suggest a few words that (in my opinion only) could be re-arranged/removed/added, or I could go the whole hog and change the tone of some sentances, or descriptions that make it flow better etc. I love to beta but I really hate insulting people or making them feel they've produced dodgy work! :(

[mooncove]

Go ahead, whole hog me, I can take it. (Um, well, depending how dodgy you think my work is!) I've done some editing in my life, and I'm a real nitpicker, so I guess I have it coming. If you think it's worth improving, I'll be glad to try. I e-mailed, so maybe it'd be better to do it that way?