Brief Lives (11/?)

[monstrousreg]

Title: Brief Lives (11/?)
Author: monstrousreg
Word count:  3421
Warnings:  POSSIBLY TRIGGERING. Mentions of domestic and sexual abuse. Violence. Read with care. 
Pairing: Erik/Charles.
Summary: Erik thinks he's going to seduce, interrogate and murder some nondescript CIA intelligence agent, and winds up biting more than
he can chew. Charles is not keen

Comments

[tahariel]

It's not underwhelming at all, it's beautiful :) I like how you've included the consequences of what they've done as well as the benefits, I'm really interested to see how that plays out.

[monstrousreg]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked the chapter =) I'll update soon!

[monstrousreg]

Thank you <3

[belladonna_izy]

Anticlimactic? Not really. It followed very well and very realisticaly the previous chapter. The newly created bond, the confusion, the will to take it slow to figure things out... just the touches and caresses between those two were so heart-warming and tender. This chapter was very true to the situation both characters were recovering from and it was full of emotion.Beautiful!I loved it. For me it was perfect!

[monstrousreg]

Thank you so much <3 You know, I think it's maybe the fact that I'm usually an action writer. I feel like not enough things really happen in these chapters, and won't until everything goes to hell. But I'm trying to develop the characters, so I don't want to rush anything... I'm going against my urge to write a fight, lol.

[loungy]

“I want to shower,” he says as he pushes back the sheets Charles had thrown over him. He gives the telepath a level, piercing look. “Then we talk.”

Poor Erik always has to take the initiative, even when he's just gone to hell and back.

[loungy]

“But be calm. My gift isn’t like yours, and your mind isn’t architectured like mine. While I might someday be able to command metal at the same level you can, you will never be able to accommodate wide long-range telepathy. Your telepathy will most likely manifest in touch-telepathy, perhaps quiet deep, but only through contact. We’ll learn to control that.”

Oh, wow. That's way unfair.

Now I think Erik shouldn't have gone through the trouble at all. Packed his things and left. Fuck this shit.

[loungy]

Apparently, I have many feelings. I hope this isn't too harsh, but here's what I think:

You're one of the few authors who writes Charles' with the intelligence he deserves and his telepathy with the edge it requires. Everything flows so smoothly, it's gorgeous. But your Charles is becoming a bit of a Gary Stu, and he's been almost unbearably condescending to Erik at times, to the point where I've begun to hope this story ends with Erik driving a metal pole through Charles' chest. Not that this would be possible right now, even if he got the helmet, because even in their supposed one-ness Charles has the edge over him wrt powers.

[monstrousreg]

Well... to tell you the truth the first time I read your comment it was really harsh, which is why I never reply to anything right away. Now that I've read it through a cuple more times, I see what you mean, and I appreciate that you're honest about it

[nausicaa83]

This wasn't anticlimatic at all! It was beautiful and heart-warming, and very... real. It just gets better with every new chapter!

[monstrousreg]

Thank you. I'm always scared of posting chapter where no real action goes on... it feels like the plot advancement here is dragging on, but then I don't want to rush the characters either, you know?