[fanfic] The Most Unexpected

[monochrome_rock]

Title: The Most Unexpected
Author/Artist: Me
Character(s): Switzerland, Liechtenstein, plus a special guest
Rating: PG
Warnings: Human names, a little shooting, bruises.
Summary: There is something wrong about Lillian, but somehow she refuses to tell Vash about it.
Notes: In my headcanon, human names are used between nations who has a rather close

Comments

[bearwithglasses]

I saw this on the comm and I was half-hoping it was Prussia and YUS IT WAS <3 That pairing is a guilty pleasure of mine. I was as worried as Vash here for Liech, for like... domestic abuse or something!

[monochrome_rock]

I'm not alone! :'D You don't see fans for these two that often, huh? Actually, I've never seen any fanworks with them. :'<

Lazy is good! At least that's how I see it. XD *unofficial queen of laziness*

[talkjive]

I realise this was likely not your intention, but this reads likes domestic abuse. A hickey would have been understandable, but covering your partner in bruises because you "forget how fragile they are"? That's not sexy. That's brutality. If in the course of sex acts you cover your partner with painful lasting marks, and do it frequently, you are doing something very badly wrong.

Not to mention, Prussia is clearly shown to keep going after she has told him to stop. That is not romantic. That is abusive.

[monochrome_rock]

I guess that's all about how you interpret it. For me, I see their relationship as completely consensual, though with some BDSM involved. I see Prussia as quite a dominant partner who comes up with these kind of ideas, and in my headcanon Liechtenstein is a shy closet-pervert who secretly loves this kind of stuff, especially being exposed to it herself, though she'd never dream of taking the initiative. Prussia is kind of rough though and doesn't know his own strength compared to Liechtenstein, who has a very fragile body which easily adapts marks like bruises. Like, just Prussia holding her arm a little too firmly could give her a bruise. She doesn't really mind though, the only thing that bothers her about the marks is the possibility of other people (especially Switzerland) knowing what they're doing and the embarrassment that follows, since she's still a closet-pervert. And like I said, their relationship involes some BDSM, so when Liechtenstein tells Prussia to stop she doesn't really mean it, and he knows that and therefore

[talkjive]

Ah. If I were you, I would rewrite this just a little to make it clear this was a consensual BDSM relationship? Even just something like, cough cough, uh, Switz, I like it a bit rough, if you follow me. As it stands you just see Prussia hurting Liechtenstein, Prussia giving her bruises, Prussia holding her down while she says stop.... Very uncomfortable to read.