I really liked this. There's a very achy feeling to the poem, hardly a technical term but I think you get what I mean. The pacing is great, the line breaks work as part of the poem as opposed to just put in. I particularly liked the simile about the two kids with stolen apples, I thought that was a really lovely image.
I found this quite lovely. The tone is well expressed and I like the imagery. Lady Bracknell, dark skin against white- you did a good job setting the mood.
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It seems 'Write or Die' really worked for you!
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I havent written poetry in a long while. And I dont write about Andrew- ever. I feel stranglely light hearted after this.
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But those last two line. Perfect. I love the idea of lonely legs. Great work, dear. <3
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Thank you so very much for reading and reviewin! I appreciate the feedback.
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Go write more.
Later will elaborate, busy now.
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may be its just the hormones but im betting its you!
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