I figured I'd better leave a comment on this entry before I forgot what I wanted to say when I get to the end : ) I love how this is turning out so far : ) You've managed to show how burdened and struggling Brendon feels without it sounding like the same thing is being said over and over again. I really liked how you managed to do that. This line: “Hey,” Ryan says suddenly, grinning deviously, “remember when Brent tried to convince us to audition that Mormon kid from his school?” ...this gave me chills! I love how you've explained the tension between Jon, Spencer and Ryan, and I can't wait to find out how all of the relationships are going to come together. ♥
I'm glad to hear it's working for you. I had a lot of problems with this fic, but the beginning remains one of my favourite things I've written. The Mormon thing is very close to my heart. I hope the rest doesn't disappoint. <3
The whole thing was wonderful. I loved the tangled tension and the way it all came together. I attached to the Ryan/Brendon maybe a little too strongly, but I loved the GSF too. It was one of my favourites of BBB so far :-)
It's cool. There's so many BBB fics, it's so overwhelming.
I've been writing so much GSF lately, and as much as I love it, I'm starting to burn out. I think after I finish the WIP I've been posting, I'm going to do some non-GSF stuff for a while.
Have to comment halfway before I forget :P First of all, what a *stellar* job you've done with the Mormonism (do you have a Mormon background? Or is this all researched?). There were 2 things that jarred a little to me: the congregation/families/etc not questioning or reporting or anything his being without his companion, but that was nothing big. The only one that really threw me was this:
Brendon has accepted that he’ll never stop thinking about boys like he does. He’s never told anyone, and he never will. But he knows as long as he doesn’t act on these feelings, he’s alright.I'm being nitpicky as all fuck here :P, 'cause I wouldn't even notice at all except that you've obviously put in the effort to get the detail right, and because the rest was so good this kind of really threw his characterisation for me when everything else made so much sense. For Brendon to be not just aware of but totally down with the compromise position without having ever spoken to a bishop or counselor...to me it seems kind of a stretch, like reading
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Hey, thanks for the comment. I myself am not a Mormon, nor do I have that background. However I have many close friends who are/were Mormons, and my girlfriend of six years was a Mormon when we met, so I have a lot of experience with it. Most of this comes from conversations I've had with them, or the problems my girlfriend had, when we first got together
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Oh yeah, for sure, no I'm actually really interested if there's a real life viewpoint coming through here :) Prying horribly, so feel free to ignore me :P, but I'd be really interested to know where your friends or girlfriend got the 'thoughts aren't damning if you abstain' position without confessing. Was that something that was taught as standard in her ward? Something from the internet? Again, please ignore me if that's too private a question, it's just (probably obviously :P) an area of interest to me :)
(cool info on lax missionaries, I don't know much about eastern states Mormonism. That's really interesting.)
You know, I'm not one-hundred percent sure where she got that information. We talk a lot about what the church taught, but I don't know if I've ever explicitly asked where it was learned. I'll ask her about it tonight
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This part legit made me cry. Just -- with Brendon the way he is and them making fun of him and oh God Panic not being Panic just makes my stomach turn. *flailyhands* I just -- wanted to leave that note before I went on. If it's affected me this much already, I'm sure this will be an amazing fic.
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I love how this is turning out so far : )
You've managed to show how burdened and struggling Brendon feels without it sounding like the same thing is being said over and over again. I really liked how you managed to do that.
This line: “Hey,” Ryan says suddenly, grinning deviously, “remember when Brent tried to convince us to audition that Mormon kid from his school?” ...this gave me chills!
I love how you've explained the tension between Jon, Spencer and Ryan, and I can't wait to find out how all of the relationships are going to come together.
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I hope the rest doesn't disappoint. <3
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The whole thing was wonderful. I loved the tangled tension and the way it all came together. I attached to the Ryan/Brendon maybe a little too strongly, but I loved the GSF too. It was one of my favourites of BBB so far :-)
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I've been writing so much GSF lately, and as much as I love it, I'm starting to burn out. I think after I finish the WIP I've been posting, I'm going to do some non-GSF stuff for a while.
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*wipes a not-quite-ironic tear* God bless you, Brendon Urie.
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Brendon has accepted that he’ll never stop thinking about boys like he does. He’s never told anyone, and he never will. But he knows as long as he doesn’t act on these feelings, he’s alright.I'm being nitpicky as all fuck here :P, 'cause I wouldn't even notice at all except that you've obviously put in the effort to get the detail right, and because the rest was so good this kind of really threw his characterisation for me when everything else made so much sense. For Brendon to be not just aware of but totally down with the compromise position without having ever spoken to a bishop or counselor...to me it seems kind of a stretch, like reading ( ... )
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(cool info on lax missionaries, I don't know much about eastern states Mormonism. That's really interesting.)
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