Thanks for the beta. :-) Alas, I have to leave in half and hour, and I won't be able to re-post Chapter 19 until Sunday night. Oh, well, it will give me something to look forward to while I'm traveling and working on grading.
BTW, did you see any problems with characterization, pacing or plot for Chapter 21a and 21b? I posted links to them in my reply to your last comment, but I don't know whether you saw them.
I think the new chapter is finally ready for beta if you're up for it. I was holding off until I was well into writing the next one so I could make sure they fit together right, but I think I've got it now.
My main concern with Chapter 22 is characterization. Events are moving pretty quickly at this point, and I've written the characters as doing and saying things a little different from how they've acted and spoken before. There are reasons for this that should be motivated by the plot. I just need to make sure that the readers aren't all like "where the hell did that come from?" So please let me know if anything feels wrong to you so I can fix it?
I'm a bit worried about this; I'm afraid I'm taking some liberties with characterization, so if you could point anything out that seems "off" to you, I'd appreciate it.
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BTW, did you see any problems with characterization, pacing or plot for Chapter 21a and 21b? I posted links to them in my reply to your last comment, but I don't know whether you saw them.
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I think the new chapter is finally ready for beta if you're up for it. I was holding off until I was well into writing the next one so I could make sure they fit together right, but I think I've got it now.
My main concern with Chapter 22 is characterization. Events are moving pretty quickly at this point, and I've written the characters as doing and saying things a little different from how they've acted and spoken before. There are reasons for this that should be motivated by the plot. I just need to make sure that the readers aren't all like "where the hell did that come from?" So please let me know if anything feels wrong to you so I can fix it?
Otherwise, I hope you enjoy it.
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22 (part A) is here: http://www.livejournal.com/users/rachelmap/40836.html and (part B) is here: http://www.livejournal.com/users/rachelmap/40970.html#cutid1
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I'm a bit worried about this; I'm afraid I'm taking some liberties with characterization, so if you could point anything out that seems "off" to you, I'd appreciate it.
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