Comments | mmouse15: Story: Prayer 5

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Story: Prayer 5

Dec 31, 2008 15:57

Title: St. Francis Prayer 5
By: mmouse15
Rating: PG
Warnings: implied intimacy, slash

( Where there is darkness, light )

prayer of st francis series, prowl, jazz, fanfiction

Comments 12

tessombra January 1 2009, 16:49:36 UTC

Each story has its difficult parts, and this was easier to bear second hand, rather than from either Jazz or Prowl's point of view (how most of us hate our fave char being in pain and suffering). But it still conveys how difficult it must have been, there's a desperation communicated when Jazz demands Prowl be near him so he knows his situation isn't a trick. Of course, it is also inevitable, reality comes not so often as a romantic walk on the beach during war.

mmouse15 January 2 2009, 05:37:05 UTC

We so often forget that they are at war. It can't be all fluff and sunshine (though I'm a fan of fluffy stories), there's got to be some pain and angst and darkness. Jazz's demanding that Prowl be there to reassure him struck me as the reaction that any torture victim would have, a 'please let me know this is real and not a figment of my imagination' type of thing.

dark_daebereth January 1 2009, 17:14:19 UTC

It usually does take one of those "just before its too late" moments before things trigger properly. So very glad Prowl was there to help Jazz, at ALL times. You really see the beginning of what they have now.
And I love Ratchet's little cursing fit, that most definitely sounds like our favourite CMO.

mmouse15 January 2 2009, 05:39:00 UTC

Doesn't it, though? Prowl needed some sign like that to give him the confidence to keep moving forward.

Ratchet's little paragraph wrote itself, I'm glad you liked it.

vejiraziel January 2 2009, 05:29:38 UTC

Finally time to finish these. @w@

I absofriggenlutely loved this one, Prowl going out to rescue Jazz, and the way Jazz so openly needed Prowl close. Wow I loved it.

mmouse15 January 2 2009, 05:41:49 UTC

I'm so glad! This is the one that showed me where I needed to go - 'Jack volunteered, and it FLOWED, so I knew it was good. It was difficult to write because of the subject matter, but it's the best story of the lot, I think. I love Prowl in this one. That, right there, is how I think of Prowl.
Jazz was too broken to hide anymore. He needed Prowl, and Prowl needed something like this to show him it was OK to progress with Jazz.

okami_myrrhibis January 2 2009, 19:37:17 UTC

Love this one - my favorite of the series thus far, I think. And your take on the whole damaged-optics-vs-visor fanon works quite nicely for me.

Great job, lady! (as always)

mmouse15 January 2 2009, 20:29:25 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm very glad you liked it. It makes sense, the visor/optics thing, so I ran with it.

tainry January 3 2009, 02:11:19 UTC

♥

mmouse15 January 3 2009, 05:20:50 UTC

^_^