Comments | mmouse15: Story: Prayer 4

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Story: Prayer 4

Dec 31, 2008 15:55

Title: St. Francis Prayer 4
By: mmouse15
Rating: PG
Warnings: implied intimacy, slash

( Where there is despair, hope )

prayer of st francis series, prowl, jazz, fanfiction

Comments 9

vejiraziel January 1 2009, 07:51:05 UTC

Rats, I got my reviews mixed up amongst the chapters. That last one was meant to go here. Still, I'mma reiterate how much I loved that little bit of Prowl getting jealous and Sunny and Sideswipe dragging Jazz to keep pursuing Prowl. <3

mmouse15 January 2 2009, 05:27:11 UTC

Sides and Sunny are not stupid, and they see what's going on. Just because Jazz was being cautious and Prowl oblivious doesn't mean that everyone else had no idea what was going on.

Blaster was the obvious Autobot for Prowl to be jealous of. I'm glad you liked it. This one was too much fun to re-write, because it all clicked.

tessombra January 1 2009, 16:43:20 UTC

Again, the different characterizations here--Sides' pretty much giving them no choice (their concern over what KIND of story he'd tell very obvious), when it turns out different, but still VERY much something one would expect Sideswipe to pay attention to, as each bot in turn (which illustrated to some extent, each bots' personality).

Cute, Prowl being jealous over Blaster, and the twins helping BOTH in the right direction. Its from the process that we learn; Prowl and Jazz both learned that there was more to their feelings than they realized--rename Blaster Cupid and move on...

mmouse15 January 2 2009, 05:28:48 UTC

Wouldn't you be wary of a story the Sides offered to tell you? I would!

You caught me! The stories finally worked when I figured out which mech matched the story. They were easy to write after that.

Glad you liked! Blaster=Cupid=cute idea!

dark_daebereth January 1 2009, 17:07:45 UTC

*giggles* Prowl jealous of Blaster, and the twins hauling Jazz off, its damn cute. I was as worried as they as to the story 'Sides would tell, but it makes a nice change to the pace the way he tells it.

mmouse15 January 2 2009, 05:30:34 UTC

Everybot can tell a story, you just have to give them a chance. Sides was jumping up and down yelling 'ME!!! HEY, over here, ME!', so I let him tell the story. I wasn't sure what was going to come out! I'm glad you liked it and the storytelling pleased you.

tainry January 3 2009, 02:00:14 UTC

Glee! Man, it's like Kirk and Spock playing three-d chess. <333333

And also yay for Bee's leg getting fixed and d'awww for Spike curling up for a nap with him. <3333

mmouse15 January 3 2009, 05:20:26 UTC

Didn't you love watching that on Star Trek? I do think of that when I write these things. 'Course, I was also listening to my husband teach our son how to play chess while I was writing it...

Yes, we did get Bee fixed up, and it's always nice to nap with a friend.

tainry January 3 2009, 05:45:12 UTC

Absoflogginlutely! We actually had a set when I was little. Dad had one, I mean. He taught us the basics of chess but I never got the hang of the 3D set. ^^;;;; Second generation Trek geek, here. ^^; The comparison's pretty close - Kirk didn't always get his aft handed him, and I bet Jazz doesn't either. <3 Differences in thinking don't mean one is always superior to another.

Bee and Spike are so cute. :D <3 Spike with his little fanboy journal...so adorkable!