Choices: Chapter Two

[mmarinov]

I know I'm late with this update - but life got hectic yesterday (okay, in the form of outings and clubbing, but still :P My car got egged! *egged* Just because we weren't responding to the lewd catcalls) But it's finally here. Not the greatest, I'll be the first to admit, but the rest will be better, I promise.

Again, I dedicate this to lady_of_d_lake for a

Comments

[mmarinov]

I'm so happy you're liking it - this chapter was a real struggle to get out for some reason. Maybe because I wrote it choppily - a bit one day, a bit another day. I'm aiming to make the rest a lot tighter.

[mmarinov]

Lol, well if it's outta love then bitch away :D My cliffhangers tend to arise out of me realizing I'm bordering on 5000 words and have yet to end the chapter. So...I think it's wise to expect quite a few of them *ducks*. I'll be updating weekly :D

[relativity1953]

I tend to write in cliff-hangers as well. Not only to keep the reader hooked, but to give myself a good place to start the next chapter/part.

This story is great. Very original. Keep it coming - I want to keep reading!

[mmarinov]

Thank you so much! And yes, cliffhangers are a lot easier to hang off of and to climb straight back into it with. They too are my narrative device of choice. ;D

[wynter_rebel]

How long has this been up and I haven't noticed?! I didn't get the memo...*sobs*. :-D

Great chapter! You have me completely enthralled because I have no idea what's going on, lol. I'm excited to find out. Perfect as usual.

[mmarinov]

Nah, this chap sucked. I read it again this morning before heading off to school and almost cried, lol. All you guys are being nice just to appease me! I knew this would happen if i started a new one with the distraction of school! I wrote this chap in too many choppy installments - I lost the characters and their emotional states. And repeated a lot of my descrips :S But! I will do all I can to salvage the rest! To draw this story back from the bribk of bad-dom. In all my lectures today - when I wasnt, you know, actualy paying attention to the lecturer :P lol- I planned the rest of this fic so that it's now tighter in my head and I have a climax to work towards. So hopefully it'll get better. I'm not saying this to fish for reassurances, lol, so I command you not to. I'm just venting :)

[wynter_rebel]

I didn't think it was that bad. The banter was awesome. And the image of Dean turning around and running back to see the stone he almost landed on...that was priceless. I could just see him saying, "I wonder what I got?" and being all happy about it, lol.

I like your story. :) And I'm not just saying that to make you feel better.

[pixel_0]

Ah, cliffhangers. Beautiful stuff. :D

What I'm starting to learn in your fics is that you kick butt at dialogue. It's so hard to get their voices down just right, and I've seen very people who can pull it off well. You're one of those people who just nails the dialogue, which really makes the read an enjoyable one.

Oh, and this? “Normal life? I’m dead! Buried with a grave marker and all! Remember that? And, legally, a suspected murderer! I did all that to help out one of your college pals, Sam, so tell me, how can I do the white picket fence and community fundraiser thing when for all intents and purposes I don’t even exist. Huh?”

Bam. I'm so glad he got Sam to shut up about that. Don't get me wrong, I love the Dean angst moments when he gets into his "I want a family" routines, but, oh did I like those lines. Really nailed them. :)

I really hope this update hasn't been up for too long. I was just going through my friends page today and went, "Update? Joy!"

[mmarinov]

Hehe, yeah there is def a general feeling among fans that Sam needs to shut up! See Dean's POV! I still love the guy, but honestly, what are the writers doing to us Dean-fans?

And yeah, my main reason for writing fanfic is to mimic dialogue - I have such fun doing that :D The story is always just fodder for me to play with their language. I'm so glad you think I'm pulling this off! Esp since I really didn't end up liking this chap, but there are a still lines in there that I'm proud of.

Thank you so much for the review! Appreciate it!