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miznarrator

That Encyclopedia Fic

Apr 25, 2007 15:08

So I was bored a couple of days ago, and Kate gave me a prompt.

Consequently...

Title: That Encyclopedia Fic
Pairing: Brendon/Ryan
Rating: PG

Totally totally AU, with thanks to calathea for beta duty. For girlintheband.

( Brendon figured, when he left the Mormon church, he'd never have to go door to door trying to get people to listen to him. )

patd, fic

Comments 10

cloudlessclimes April 25 2007, 15:26:05 UTC

um. wow. okay. so this? I love it. I like every single thing about it. There's not a single word or thought or idea that shouldn't be here. And I love how it..leaves room for more.

miznarrator April 25 2007, 15:41:25 UTC

*beams*

YAYE! I'm glad you approve!

♥!

violentfires April 26 2007, 02:45:57 UTC

I think the thing I like best about this, not including the image of Brendon going door-to-door for *anything*, is all the intricacies at the very end -- the feel of Ryan's hand, the way he moves his elbow, Brendon's bold nervousness. It's so carefully descripted, but in this economical way that brings the action (so brief, right? they're only shaking hands) into crystal focus, and the anticipation in it is nearly tangible.

Such great stuff, no lie. ♥

miznarrator April 26 2007, 13:15:13 UTC

I have a weird fixation about first meetings... first times are good, but that moment when you meet someone and sometimes you know they're going to be very important in your life and sometimes you don't-- and, yeah. I like writing that.

Thank you so much re the economy of language too. I am shit at grand description, focusing instead on trying to get little details right. I'm glad it worked this time.

xx!

softlyforgotten April 26 2007, 03:25:36 UTC

:D That is awesome. I love When the guy moves his elbow, just a fraction of an inch but enough-Brendon knows he’s won. ♥!

girlintheband April 26 2007, 12:53:55 UTC

So pretty much you win for working with the most random prompt ever. ♥

Like everyone else, I love the description of Ryan's movement and the handshake at the end. Brilliantly-written.

miznarrator April 26 2007, 13:10:50 UTC

You're a gem. &diamonds;

You have to tell me what you were thinking of when you gave me that prompt!

*pokes*

girlintheband April 26 2007, 14:18:43 UTC

I was thinking of garage sales and second-hand fairs and musty old bookstores, in which Brendon becomes obsessed with finding a complete set of these particular ancient encyclopedias because he thinks it might help him understand Ryan better. He remembers that Spencer gave Ryan a small encyclopedia once, for a birthday, maybe, back when the band first started out; a really old one that his grandfather or something used to own, and Ryan had looked at Spencer with big eyes and an even bigger smile. Brendon had never quite understood why. Ryan had taken to quoting pieces at him, lifting sections straight out of the book, hands gesturing wildly and his voice excited; Brendon wanted to see if he could go one better, say this is all I can give you right now, but it's a start, right?

Or something.

Yours is better.

miznarrator April 26 2007, 14:49:10 UTC

...wow.

Yes.

WRITE THIS FOR ME.

callsigns April 27 2007, 21:29:45 UTC

*waves*

Hi! Sorry to drop in like this, but I didn't see an email on your userinfo and Plus accounts don't get the @lj.com email, so resorting to comments it was! Could you possibly email me at jessagirl (at) gmail (dot) com? There's something you and I and eleanor_lavish ought to discuss! :D