♥ this is just as good, if not better, than when i read it the first time. were there a few extra scenes? or extended? the ones with sam and teddy maybe? loved the detail with teddy turning a bit green and sam and her awesome fierce shitting sperm threat, haha. and ♥ billy and his mom~~ always makes me melt. though billy himself makes me want to cheer him on and cuddle him. perhaps why i much admire jamie and his dorkiness. Can't wait for the next issue! Clean up your act, Teddy! >:(
I read this fic with a huge smile on my face, thank you for the great reading! I loved the first version of this story, but you did an amazing job with the rewriting. The whole story flows better and the way you wrote the developing relationship between our boys is wonderfully sweet and rich and vivid. ♥ Can't wait for the sequel... :)
This is....this...sweet baby jesus this is amazing. I read the first version about a month ago and completely freaking fell in love with your writing, as this may be the the BEST YA fic I've ever read. Your characterizations are delicious, and as good as the first version was, this second one is...EVEN MORE WONDERFUL. The added scenes, especially the addition of Sam to the Spiderman scene, and the New Years Eve scene give this fic so much more personality and make Teddy especially so much more of a person and so much more realistically likable.
Oh, and I blame you for the fact that Billy Don't Be A Hero has been stuck in my head for weeks (which is more funny than anything else...)
Oh God, Billy Don't Be a Hero has been stuck in my head for at least a month, off and on. Well, that and Flashdance, which won't show up for at least another chapter, but which haunts my dreams.
I'm so glad you enjoyed my story! It was/is a lot of fun to write. I'm thrilled people are liking it, and that the rewrite worked. Thanks so much for the feedback!
My roommate is starting to hate me because I've developed a tendency to start singing vaguely out of key, pause, and then curse when I realize what I was doing...
and oh no, Flashdance? dammit now I'm really excited for the madness which is to come. PLEASE HURRY but not at the expense of quality!!! haha GOOD LUCK!
Summary: SQUEEEEEE ♥ Comment: I read the first version at archiveofourown almost by mistake - I don't do WIPs, if I can help it: I usually bookmark them for later. But I'm really glad I've started reading this. There are a lot of fantastic B/T fics out there, but this is the first one I've read about Billy and Teddy knowing each other before Iron Lad found them which is both plotty and canon-friendly. I see Billy as more straighforward than you do, but - hell - it works. I love his general awkwardness! The background you worked out for Billy also fits pretty well into continuity, as do the OCs - which, by the way, are both great. Usually I don't like them because the writers tend to attach too much importance to them - not necessarly in a MarySue way - but, at least for now, you're not overusing them, just writing them as a mean to describe Billy's personality. Which isn't easy. The Sam scene was good - Billy interacting with a girl in front of "Spidey" and Greg is a great idea, and makes you want to know a little more about her
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PS: Teddy totally needs a kick in the pants.
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I loved the first version of this story, but you did an amazing job with the rewriting. The whole story flows better and the way you wrote the developing relationship between our boys is wonderfully sweet and rich and vivid. ♥
Can't wait for the sequel... :)
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I read the first version about a month ago and completely freaking fell in love with your writing, as this may be the the BEST YA fic I've ever read. Your characterizations are delicious, and as good as the first version was, this second one is...EVEN MORE WONDERFUL. The added scenes, especially the addition of Sam to the Spiderman scene, and the New Years Eve scene give this fic so much more personality and make Teddy especially so much more of a person and so much more realistically likable.
Oh, and I blame you for the fact that Billy Don't Be A Hero has been stuck in my head for weeks (which is more funny than anything else...)
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I'm so glad you enjoyed my story! It was/is a lot of fun to write. I'm thrilled people are liking it, and that the rewrite worked. Thanks so much for the feedback!
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and oh no, Flashdance? dammit now I'm really excited for the madness which is to come. PLEASE HURRY but not at the expense of quality!!! haha GOOD LUCK!
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I read the first version at archiveofourown almost by mistake - I don't do WIPs, if I can help it: I usually bookmark them for later. But I'm really glad I've started reading this.
There are a lot of fantastic B/T fics out there, but this is the first one I've read about Billy and Teddy knowing each other before Iron Lad found them which is both plotty and canon-friendly.
I see Billy as more straighforward than you do, but - hell - it works. I love his general awkwardness! The background you worked out for Billy also fits pretty well into continuity, as do the OCs - which, by the way, are both great. Usually I don't like them because the writers tend to attach too much importance to them - not necessarly in a MarySue way - but, at least for now, you're not overusing them, just writing them as a mean to describe Billy's personality. Which isn't easy.
The Sam scene was good - Billy interacting with a girl in front of "Spidey" and Greg is a great idea, and makes you want to know a little more about her ( ... )
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