Comments | mivalentina: Left 2 Die: Part 1.5

mivalentina

Left 2 Die: Part 1.5

Aug 21, 2010 10:37

BANG. Luke startled awake. He instinctively reached for the other side of the bed, but his hand met nothing but the comforter. The door to the room was suddenly busted open and Luke scrambled up against the headboard grabbing the lamp on the bedside table as a weapon. Men with raised guns, dressed in military issued garb, filed in screaming at him ( Read more... )

reid, lure, noah, zombies, atwt, luke/reid, fanfiction, luke

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aliciamasters August 21 2010, 15:45:11 UTC

I loved the first chapter! It's very clever, and I think you kept Reid very in character. I also love Luke carrying around his cell phone because of Noah's picture. I'm looking forward to seeing how Luke and Noah got separated.

Is it wrong of me to hope Noah is a zombie?

I think this one is really 1.5, not 2.5. I started reading chapter 2, and I could tell I missed a bunch. You may want to renumber your header.

I'm eager to read this!