D'awww this is really cute. x) ♥ I love the interactions between Raven and Anise, they're adorable. I also like how Yeager is such a sly creeper~
The only thing I have to critique - sorry if this isn't okay. D: - is just that...when you refer to Gauche and Droite...you shouldn't really refer you them as women. When I hear the word "women" I picture tall, leggy, busty bimbos. *cough* Or at least females in their mid-twenties. Those two are more "girls" or "young ladies" than women.
Other than that, and a bit of editing, it's really good. c:
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He'll definitely show up again later, them being neighbors and all. c:
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The only thing I have to critique - sorry if this isn't okay. D: - is just that...when you refer to Gauche and Droite...you shouldn't really refer you them as women. When I hear the word "women" I picture tall, leggy, busty bimbos. *cough* Or at least females in their mid-twenties. Those two are more "girls" or "young ladies" than women.
Other than that, and a bit of editing, it's really good. c:
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Glad you like it. c:
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