Comments | mistr3ssquickly: PW, "What It Is," Klavier/Apollo, NC-17

mistr3ssquickly

PW, "What It Is," Klavier/Apollo, NC-17

Oct 22, 2008 12:09

This is based off a gorgeous WIP lineart posted some days ago by Nyarlathotep23, which mesmerized me enough that I broke my no-more-fanfiction rule and wrote a story to go along with it ( Read more... )

apollo, fanfiction, phoenix wright, klavier, nc-17

Comments 4

sailormac October 23 2008, 01:47:32 UTC

You always come up with such inventive styles to write smut in, and this is no exception. It's damn hot - it feels raw and real, like *sex*, and not staged, strike-a-pose porn.

mistr3ssquickly October 23 2008, 03:23:34 UTC

This one was a show of ... snottery? I had a writing prof who said "never start a sentence with 'it.'" and I just ... I dunno. Temptation to break the rules wins out AGAIN. XD

Glad you liked the porn, hon! :D

~m

dried_frog_pill October 29 2008, 03:41:41 UTC

This is just...I wish I was more eloquent when all I want to do is grin like a loon and go "Sooooo gooooooooooood" because I can be coherent and intelligent. But argh, this is so wonderful and inventive. I love the lines of dialogue interspersed with the "It's..." repetition. It just works so well.

And I love the mentions of Klavier's hands shaking, or being less graceful - like he's still anxious about how this is going to go, but still so very eager at the same time.

mistr3ssquickly April 7 2010, 20:25:09 UTC

LOOK WHO FAILED TO SEE THIS COMMENT FOR OVER A YEAR oh my god i suck i'm so sorry.

I'm so thrilled that you liked this story! I was told by a writing professor once in college to "never start a sentence with 'it's'" and just ... had to rebel, I guess? I enjoyed the rhythm of it when I wrote it and am so pleased that the rhythm works for readers as well.

Thank you so much, love! It was delightful to happen across this comment a year and a half late! XD