Klavier's ... ugh. I wasn't intending for him to be as big a pest as he's become, back when I started this thinking it would be like 5-8 chapters. He's on my List. XD
I'm so glad you like this, hon! Thank you so much for reading! ♥
I like how Klavier isn't the shining example of perfection in this, and that he still has his bratty moments. Glad to see there was such a quick update~ :D Looking forward to more.
Seeing bad things happen to good characters makes me sad, but it hurts so good in this case, and my desire to see 'Polly triumph over his personal demons, physical difficulties, and well-meaning coddlers is strong enough to overlook it
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I'm so very pleased that you're enjoying this, sweetie! It's been really fun working with Apollo in this state, especially in writing everyone flawed. Makes me feel better about my own failings as a human being. XD As for Trucy, I'm pretty sure she'd have some flaws if I let her be around the stupid men more than I do, but as it is yes, you're right, she's just little and cute and really scared for her big brother, poor girl. Not that I have an unfair soft-spot for her, noooo ... XD
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estdkgmdtyhkdrgfjd Klavier diva BITCH FIT. I loved the emotions that went into this, and Trucy being all "I WILL BE MORE MATURE THAN THE THREE OF YOU PUT TOGETHER. >8[" Keep going, I love you, not-so-anon. XD ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
*snerk* Poor Trucy. I've been feeling a little guilty for making her so not-fucked-up, but it occurs to me: she's the only non-lawyer, so she doesn't feel the same pressures the others do. So she can be my little mature ray of sunshine. XD
Awesome, as usual. I love the build up in the beginning, the weight of the history and past experiences in that kitchen. You build their background and the bones of their relationship so well, I love it so much.
I love how you describe everything as a court-room scene, it's quite powerful. Trucy is awesome (full of little sister indignation) when she starts taking notes. *grin* And then I like having Klavier and Mr. Wright actually getting along and (marginally) working together to hash out ideas and theories and stuff. *smile* It smoothes the tension for a bit.
And then you just kill that buzz of satisfaction in a well-worked case with Klavier's arguments and disappointment. Klavier snorts. "I was led to believe that your disappearing act earlier was brought about by our attempts to do just that, Herr Hypocritical," he says. "Was it not?" I can practically feel the bitterness rolling off of this line. Klavier does not take disappointment well. The awkwardness after Klavier's abrupt departure from the
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Klavier's being unreasonable.
I'm still loving this, and I just love your vivid imagery! Very... vivid!
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I'm so glad you like this, hon! Thank you so much for reading! ♥
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wanttoknowwhathappenedgaaah
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More's up and more'n that's on its way! Thanks for reading! ♥
~m
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So...
I read all of this a couple days ago, and should have responded sooner, but I'm bad about that.
Anyway. The point is, I'm here now, to tell you how: ☆ ☆ ☆F-ING AWESOME☆ ☆ ☆
...This fic is.
I was pointed here by steam_pilot, and sent darkenedwings in this direction myself.
Seeing bad things happen to good characters makes me sad, but it hurts so good in this case, and my desire to see 'Polly triumph over his personal demons, physical difficulties, and well-meaning coddlers is strong enough to overlook it ( ... )
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I'm so very pleased that you're enjoying this, sweetie! It's been really fun working with Apollo in this state, especially in writing everyone flawed. Makes me feel better about my own failings as a human being. XD As for Trucy, I'm pretty sure she'd have some flaws if I let her be around the stupid men more than I do, but as it is yes, you're right, she's just little and cute and really scared for her big brother, poor girl. Not that I have an unfair soft-spot for her, noooo ... XD ( ... )
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Aww, I love you too! ♥♥♥
~m
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Awesome, as usual. I love the build up in the beginning, the weight of the history and past experiences in that kitchen. You build their background and the bones of their relationship so well, I love it so much.
I love how you describe everything as a court-room scene, it's quite powerful. Trucy is awesome (full of little sister indignation) when she starts taking notes. *grin* And then I like having Klavier and Mr. Wright actually getting along and (marginally) working together to hash out ideas and theories and stuff. *smile* It smoothes the tension for a bit.
And then you just kill that buzz of satisfaction in a well-worked case with Klavier's arguments and disappointment. Klavier snorts. "I was led to believe that your disappearing act earlier was brought about by our attempts to do just that, Herr Hypocritical," he says. "Was it not?" I can practically feel the bitterness rolling off of this line. Klavier does not take disappointment well. The awkwardness after Klavier's abrupt departure from the ( ... )
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