PW, "The Slow Ascent after the Sharpest Drop: X," Apollo/Klavier, PG

[mistr3ssquickly]

It's always so strange, to me, how arcs work out. I'll struggle and struggle with one section, then when I get to the part I've been dreading because I'm expecting it to give me trouble ... *BOOM*. It's done. Like two chapters of it. Imagine that

Comments

[iczer6]

I really think you're overdoing the stuttering on this part.

Apollo my stutter occasionally but if he tripped over his own words ever time he got flustered I doubt he'd be able to make his case in court.

[mistr3ssquickly]

That's fine. It's just one person's take on the character, eh?

[iczer6]

I did enjoy the part with Trucy, while Phoenix and Klavier may mean well I think they are overprotecting both Trucy and Apollo.

[mistr3ssquickly]

I'm glad you liked that part. I rather enjoyed writing it. And yeah, Phoenix and Klavier ... they're pissing me off, in this arc, and I'm writing it! XP Silly men.

Thanks, dear. :)

~m

[steam_pilot]

Although I do agree that Apollo is a bit too stuttery, (overall he acts pretty much like Phoenix did in games 1-3, except a little bit more spastic), I STILL LOVE THIS FIC.

I pimped it out in my lj, although I don't know if that'd help or not.

[mistr3ssquickly]

*eternally grateful for the pimping* Thank you thank you thank you!

I'll try to work on Apollo a little ... maybe make things clearer in the process. People seem to be getting antsy over what happened, so I doubt that'll get anyone's knickers in a twist, eh? XD

I took out a lot of the stuttering, as well, so hopefully the two combined will reclaim the character. Thanks dear!

~m

[trinastar]

I'm proud of Apollo for going through with a somewhat thought out plan to get more information out of Kristoph. I understand that he's stressed out and trying to think through everything on his feet and he's caught at a disadvantage after his accident, which would be understandable for the stutter.

Oh, I don't know what to say about the final little show down, but I certainly liked the way that Trucy is willing to stand at Apollo's side no matter what.

[mistr3ssquickly]

I think our handicap, yours and mine, is that we've not played the game. (You haven't, right? I seem to remember that you're in this blind, like me and Apollo.) I think the complaint about the stuttering is it's not canon. So I'll try to fix it ... although a burned-and-blinded Apollo isn't canon either ... hell, Apollo as Klavier's lover isn't canon! ... so who knows.

Also: Trucy's my girl. I'm glad you liked her showdown! XD Thanks for reading, hon. ♥

~m

[darkenedwings]

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Oh god, I really like this fic. ♥ It's been a while since I've been so engrossed in a multichapter fic like this, and I'm looking forward to more. :D

[mistr3ssquickly]

:D

I'm really glad you're enjoying this! More should be out every few days; I think we're looking at maybe ~16 chapters? *total shot in the dark*

Thanks for reading! I'm thrilled that you like the story so far! ♥

~m

[crystal_lilly]

Oh, yes. There you go, adding nice little plot twists and making Kristoph almost likable for a minute. I love how you snapped that bond of mentor/protege right back into place for Kristoph and Apollo. It was just beautiful. The little wordplays between them, how they still know each other's mannerisms even after Kristoph went to jail... lovely. Fabulous.

The beginning is a fascinating part of Apollo's history. I love how the mere thought of having the stigma of a bad grade on the refrigerator for all to see was what drove Apollo to run away. (Not the actual bad grade itself, just the thought of having it displayed for all to view.) *smile* Now that's character building and background right there. *hugs you* I love it. And Apollo's desire to burn the offending paper? Priceless!!And then you tied it right in to the way Apollo had to sneak out of Klavier's apartment. That's a good transition, I really like that part. And then, the part I most love in the whole section, was Klavier's reaction when Apollo returned. At