The Thick Black Line (2 of 3)

[mister_troper]

Title: The Thick Black Line
Genre: Fiction (Time Travel)
Word Count: 1840
Notes: Part 2 of 3. Yes, the prompt caused me to expand it. No edit requested because of the word count, but comments always welcome. You may find part one here

The Story So Far: In one timeline, we are introduced to Henry, a man whose future selves keep returning to the

Comments

[darthneko]

AHHHHH! Oh man, I think I love this part even better than the last one. This is awesome and so very entertaining. ^___^

Possible favorite line (excluding the last one, which tops everything): "Oh," said Bridgett, "you're a stalker using time travel. That's so less creepy than a regular stalker."

[fawatson]

I agree - that is an A1 line. I look forward to reading the next instalment (soon I hope).

[mister_troper]

Thanks.

That was something of a later development, out of that moment of, when actually writing a time travel love(?) story, just how creepy and weird it stood objectively, which isn't a point I hear raised very often.

[mister_troper]

Thanks, and glad you enjoyed it.

The original draft of this was actually entirely too emo, dark, and dreadful, which I took one read of, said "yuck," and tried to make it at least a little lighthearted.

[mister_troper]

Thanks very much for the edits. I don't ask for edits on any piece over the advisory limit, so this is very helpful.

"i.e. martial, not marital." - *is embarrassed* My tendency to malprop this stems from reading a joke that used it to great effect. The same holds true for etymology/entomology.

"What kind of scientist art thou, to leave out units?" - No, not nine of anything, just the number nine. What? Why are you looking me like that?

[rephen]

Can't help but laugh inappropriately and loudly at parts of this. Specially at the name tags, and at the stalker comment, and at the Aliens bits. The ending is a cruel CLIFFHANGER, though! Cant wait to read more of this! More, more, please!

[mister_troper]

Thanks! Glad you laughed. It may prove to be less of a cliffhanger than you think, though...

[more_dragoncelt]

Time travel will never cease to completely baffle me and I raise my glass to anyone who has the moxie to try writing it. XD Well done.

[mister_troper]

It's easy, as long as you keep in mind that time isn't a matter of events following each other, it's more of a Timey Wimey Ball, so the only trick is to remember which game you're playing with the ball.

And thanks for reading!

[more_dragoncelt]

*laughs* Yes, the Wibbly Wobbly Timey Wimey thing. That was an awesome episode of Doctor Who.